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Westenev

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I... hope these short posts come across as Raven being a difficult person to interact with, and not as lazy writing. Maybe it comes off as both.

Still...

How would Raven know the girl was a powerful psyonic? Do demons/the average joe have an instinctual feeling about these sorts of things, or would she have had experience with such magics beforehand?
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14-Mar-2017 00:34:49 - Last edited on 14-Mar-2017 00:35:38 by Westenev

Azi Demonica

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I'd suggest mentioning body language and tone of voice to emphasize on how Raven is a difficult person.

Raven noticed that the devilish girl is levitating (due to her glowing skin) and the girl knew some of Raven's history accurately (dreams, betrayal by master), making Raven deduce that the girl was a psionic. Or maybe it was a bad idea to assume Raven would assume these?

14-Mar-2017 01:01:52

Westenev

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Azi Demonica said :
I'd suggest mentioning body language and tone of voice to emphasize on how Raven is a difficult person.

Raven noticed that the devilish girl is levitating (due to her glowing skin) and the girl knew some of Raven's history accurately (dreams, betrayal by master), making Raven deduce that the girl was a psionic. Or maybe it was a bad idea to assume Raven would assume these?

Well, I mean, this is taking the big assumption that she cares or even notices the girl in the first place. I didn't list it in the bio, but she's a very... despondent to stimuli that doesn't interest her directly. The lack of tone or body language, I feel, assumes Raven remains quite still and passionless.

That said, I don't think Raven is a thoughtless person either. Perhaps I could try delving deeper into her thoughts?

Also, I don't think it was a bad idea; I asked it as a sort of world building question!
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14-Mar-2017 01:59:53

Azi Demonica

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Annie,
I will be posting soon, just need to finish typing.

West,
OK then, I'll try to keep this in mind. She's a rather emotionless person, then?

Delving into her thoughts would be a good idea, that way, I can expand the story to reflect her character more easily/better.

OK then, but I can remove it if you want. The idea came from Mass Effect, of which Shepard sometimes knows things the player does not, so I thought I'd try it out, to have little interests formed and so build the relation between user and character. My next post, which is almost done, will reveal a few things more directly via dialogue.

14-Mar-2017 02:31:43

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