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NotFishing

NotFishing

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Emo Muslim, I'm sorry but there are several problems with your bio.

1) The races. You mentioned elves and a species called Teccans. Neither of those are in this thread yet and you have not submitted your own race bio. Additionally, you mentioned that the Teccans could shapeshift between a human form and a bird form. There is honestly no way to justify such a drastic shapeshift without magic, and there is no magic in this world.

2) The location. You say it is in Siberia. That's already a gigantic area that I can't let you have all to yourself. Your size to population ratio is extremely disproportionate too - it's the same as Dormoor, which (in size) is tiny compared to you. Also, you say your nation consists of several islands, when there are barely any islands located around Siberia.

3) The new metal you introduced. I clearly said you can't introduce any metals that don't exist in the real world. Not to mention you've essentially created a metal stronger than titanium (you even made it outright invincible against anything other than itself, which is ridiculously overpowered.) While it wasn't posted on the actual thread, which is my mistake, I do believe that at some point I said we're all at iron tech or below. And this would have shown in the other bios.

4) Your navy. None of those ship classifications were around at this period of time. Those were invented only a few hundred years ago, while we're somewhere in the Greek or early Roman eras. The ships used during these times were smaller and relied on outmaneuvering and ramming their opponents in combat. The ships you mentioned are far more advanced and utilized cannons, something we aren't even near inventing.

5) Your trade with Dormoor. Siberia (where your empire is supposedly based) is on the opposite of Sorus, which is extremely hostile towards Dormoor. Going straight through is extremely risky, and going around is impractically far when there are closer nations.

(continued) Beneath the gold, the Bitter Steel.

03-Sep-2015 03:18:52 - Last edited on 03-Sep-2015 03:35:27 by NotFishing

Inferi

Inferi

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Honestly, I'm not sure how much more I actually have to write. The only ones who are having specific stuff happen at the start are the three new arrivals. Everyone else has to choose what they want to do before I can get into specifics.

interruptions op pls nerf Done in by the dubious doings of destiny.

03-Sep-2015 03:19:27 - Last edited on 03-Sep-2015 03:19:49 by Inferi

NotFishing

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6. Your history. The Sorus Empire wasn't even considering expanding onto the continent 200 years ago. 10 billion gold is an absurd amount of coin. You outright godmodded Dormoor into a trade agreement and Sorus into once controlling them without even consulting me, when I clearly said in the rules to discuss things like that beforehand. Then you mentioned an alchemy mistake that generated fog when again, magic doesn't exist in this world.

Sorry, but it makes me doubt you actually read that much of the thread.

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Corbonyo, I've been meaning to discuss your people arriving at the council even further. They have to say what nation they are from, otherwise they are not getting in for reasons I have already stated. And your people wouldn't appear as monstrous as you claimed considering there are already minotaur like creatures and half-giants in this world. King Horic could have easily heard the rumors and just sent a messenger in to see if there truly was a civilization there. Beneath the gold, the Bitter Steel.

03-Sep-2015 03:30:02

Corbonyo

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My only problem with emo is that he said the goeraks feared his nation. My beasts fear nothing.


Capt im gonna go ahead and tell you what i had planned since im not in the best condition to think right now. I was going to have a party of humans (who have been taking advantage of the goeraks peaceful nature, threatening their people and what not.) tell you that they know how to reach the goerak tribe as safely as possible to get their help in this war considering they could operate heavy weapons if made for them etc etc. You would arrive and meet the leader of course but then you'll learn the true motive of the "bandits" and conflict (not combat) would arise and depending on how that turned out there might be an agreement between them.

Other than that the Goeraks would not leave the safety of the forest unless it was for the good of their people. And i wasn't saying that they wouldn't fit in its just the knowledge of them varies from person to person. Travelers would have never seen an alpha and beta together and since on is 8 foot and the other is 4 there could be confusion

03-Sep-2015 03:41:25

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