CASUAL REVIEW
40 out of 75 points - Plot: This was where I felt this short story struggled the most. I kept trying to attach to the storyline and the plot, but there just wasn't anything to hook onto. It was primarily an introduction, and it did an awesome job of leading up to something. But it's hard to consider this a strength, seeing as there weren't any true events transpiring. I understand, however, that this wasn't the intent of the story; but, seeing as it is part of the criteria, I can't award too many points for it.
60 out of 75 points - Characters: At first, I was considering giving a low score, because you only had one character, but upon reconsideration I decided that this character was very strongly developed. His appreciation for nature, his anticipation of the future, and his courage are all well depicted. However, I felt that his physical appearance and his persona was almost non-existant, falling in the shadow of the description of the surrounding area (which was extremely well written...but over-emphasized at certain points)
50 out of 50 points - Wrting/Grammar: I honestly have very few complaints. There were a few awkward phrases (and if you'd like me to point those out, simply post on my review thread and I'll point them out to you), but aside from that, your word choice was phenomenal. You've got a knack for describing the background setting without overusing descriptive terms.
155 out of 200 points - Final Score
Extra Notes: I think your description, as mentioned previously, was incredible. However...it became redundant, at points, and the story was lacking in any true action. I don't know if you're still intending on submitting applications for more of your short stories, but I'll definitely look forward to reading them if you do. I'll go archive this one now.
13-Jul-2011 01:26:43
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