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29-Sep-2011 07:43:33

Sonicfanx1
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Sonicfanx1

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Valley of Shadows
Very very nice! I could see images in my mind! I felt this was actually a Preludge to a bigger story! Damn! If this was actually a book, you'd make tons!!! I have a strange question though, I thought blood was a darker red, then crimson. And when you said "crimson Liquid" I thought water colored Crimson, or a ruby kind of color.
96/100
4.9/5
You surpased my expections man...I'll read the next short story. Status: "Retired" From RuneScape. May come back to get 99 Slayer in 1 or 2 years.

30-Sep-2011 10:54:02

Sonicfanx1
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Sonicfanx1

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Vagery
As i read your story, i didn't realise untill i saw the word "Gorged" did i realize you were talking about Effigys. I also enjoy everytime you start a new season, or a stage the Effigy is in, you actually relate to the paragraph/part. The way you described the surroundings, the fear, the detail was superb.
5/5
100/100
This is briliant, a work of art man. I think you would grow up to be a real author one day, if you do. I look forward to reading your books. Status: "Retired" From RuneScape. May come back to get 99 Slayer in 1 or 2 years.

30-Sep-2011 11:00:32

Sonicfanx1
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Sonicfanx1

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-The Poltergeist-
Pretty much, last night, i was afraid to read it because i'd get a nightmare...i was correct. The story overall was good. Like your others, i gave me images in my head. I could see a dark house in the middle of the night, surrounded by dead trees. The House was pretty large but not considered a mansion. I could see no spech parts in this. It was fine, since the girl was scared to the core and the poltergeist was freaking me out as it stalked the girl. The ending gave me a feeling on how strong the Poltergeist was. To be able to tear down walls and erupt purple flames is a strong one, you made everyone agnolage how strong it was. Although it seemed pretty clear in the end, the poltergeist killed the girl in the end, it seemed kinda overkill to just kill a girl by choking her...couldn't the poltergeist just kill her swiftly then absorb her essence?
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5/5
Perfect...a nice creepy ghost story right after school...now can i go to the bathroom so i can wet myself? Status: "Retired" From RuneScape. May come back to get 99 Slayer in 1 or 2 years.

01-Oct-2011 07:06:42

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