Once again, I am thoroughly amazed at your work. I absolutely adore the repetitive structure of this new piece, and your vocabulary and description served you brilliantly. The mango analogy was somewhat bizarre at first, but I think you pulled it off beautifully and it really became a very interesting and vivid metaphor.
Congratulations on winning Round Two of the contest - your story was, as ever, excellent.
I've made a short story thread, if you're interested. It only contains my round two entry on it as current; I suppose this means I should write some more.
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