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Well, I finally began writing. Although it's nothing close to the bio I posted, and the prologue is only half finished, I'd like to show you what I've got.
Here it is.
Prologue
The young man trudged up the hallway.
Concerned faces eyed him from the shadows. He could hear footsteps echoing his own.
The shadowy faces began to whisper.
“Slay the beast.”
Those three words, repeated over and over, washed over the young man.
He had to do it. It would mean prosperity for his family, which lost its face during the war.
The soft light at the end of the hallway grew closer. Fewer of the onlookers followed him, for fear of the light.
The light was the monster’s advantage. After years in the dark, the citizens of Talos grew sensitive to light, eyes growing weak and more accustomed to darkness. All the others that tried to kill the beast were temporarily blinded upon entering its lair, giving the monster an unfair advantage.
The young man had trained for this by exposing himself to soft light, moving on to brighter light every month. He had begun to get color in his skin again.
The young man’s hallway trek was coming to a close. The light grew brighter, but he could bear it. He stopped at a door which appeared to be radiating light. At this point, no one was following him anymore, but he could still hear soft words.
“Slay the beast.”
Gathering his courage, the young man threw open the door and brandished his dagger.
The young man’s screams could be heard at the beginning of the hallway. The doors shut, and hopes were destroyed.
Well, that's it for now. Constructive criticism, please!
Here it is.
Prologue
The young man trudged up the hallway.
Concerned faces eyed him from the shadows. He could hear footsteps echoing his own.
The shadowy faces began to whisper.
“Slay the beast.”
Those three words, repeated over and over, washed over the young man.
He had to do it. It would mean prosperity for his family, which lost its face during the war.
The soft light at the end of the hallway grew closer. Fewer of the onlookers followed him, for fear of the light.
The light was the monster’s advantage. After years in the dark, the citizens of Talos grew sensitive to light, eyes growing weak and more accustomed to darkness. All the others that tried to kill the beast were temporarily blinded upon entering its lair, giving the monster an unfair advantage.
The young man had trained for this by exposing himself to soft light, moving on to brighter light every month. He had begun to get color in his skin again.
The young man’s hallway trek was coming to a close. The light grew brighter, but he could bear it. He stopped at a door which appeared to be radiating light. At this point, no one was following him anymore, but he could still hear soft words.
“Slay the beast.”
Gathering his courage, the young man threw open the door and brandished his dagger.
The young man’s screams could be heard at the beginning of the hallway. The doors shut, and hopes were destroyed.
Well, that's it for now. Constructive criticism, please!
27-Aug-2014 02:57:40
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