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Dreamweaver

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'I am Vasquen, a simple gardener, living north of Lumbridge. Here is my story.
'Dark indeed was my childhood. When I was young, goblins raided my home and I was taken. For many years, I was imprisoned underground with nothing save stench and darkness. I still know not why I was captured. Ransom perhaps.
'Then one day, shining knights attacked and I was discovered! But alas, the good soldiers knew not who I was nor from whence I had come. So I was brought to Lumbridge, and apprenticed with a gardener. And there I found Fayeth.
'She was also apprenticed into gardening, but under my master's bitter rival. I was strictly forbidden to approach her, lest I divulge secrets, so I kept myself hidden, fearing to lose my home and profession.
'But oh, how I admired her. I was utterly smitten. How can one tumble into love without meeting? Yet I had, without doubt or reservation. The way she walked! Her hair! Her eyes! Her laugh, and especially her smile! She was pure magic.
'At last, nearing the end of my apprenticeship, my heart could bear the torment no more. I had to confess my ardour or be driven to madness. So with heart pounding, I hid in the orchard, waiting for her. Soon she arrived, as radiant as ever.
'I stepped out from behind the tree.
'”M'lady, I am Vasquen.”
'She looked at me, transfixed. In all her dazzling beauty, she gazed into my eyes.
'”Vasquen?” she repeated as I came closer. Her voice was breathy and sonorous.
'*Yes,” I whispered, quieter than I intended. “Fayeth, I must confess...* but she was running towards me, hair streaming, her expression aglow with euphoria! She jumped into my arms and hugged me, kissing my face passionately.
'”My brother! You have returned!”'

~Dreamweaver~
July 2008

09-Jul-2008 00:10:56 - Last edited on 09-Jul-2008 00:11:55 by Dreamweaver

Dreamweaver
Aug Member 2003

Dreamweaver

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Thanks as always, Geo. :)
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Mod Craddock's Score for "I Am Vasquen":
Plot: 19
Characters/character development: 19
Imagery: 18
Impact: 19
Structure: 17
Total: 92
Fantastic twist. ^_^

09-Jul-2008 04:52:47 - Last edited on 14-Jul-2008 05:14:51 by Dreamweaver

Patriotic Br

Patriotic Br

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I uh... I started a league for reviewers *not a guild*. It's a place for anyone and everyone, inexperienced reviewers and those of us who've done it for awhile!
You apply to join it, and I'll put you in the section you think you belong in, and you also have the option to be looking for a guild. This means that people can come here to look for someone to employ in their guild as a reviewer.
Anyone who's looking for some tips on ANYTHING can come here, but it's mainly for reviewing tips. We try to pass on our knowledge to the inexperienced members of our guild.
You can also apply for your thread to join the Union, which is a new abstract community in which all types of productive threads can come and advertise on the League. If it's a story guild, you can also make it a requirement that your employees join the League so they stay in contact with each other and are constantly getting good tips.
While we have only six members now, I hope to get many more members, so that we may all become better reviewers.
I was wondering if you were interested... If you want to find out more about it, check out the thread for it. I'll only post the QFC and name if I get permission from you.
It's like a mix of the Story Discussion thread and LinkedIn. There is also a spot on the front page where any member of the league can ask to have an excerpt from their story be put on. This may attract some attention, getting them more readers. I provide the QFC underneath it, so they know where to find the full version.
Let me know if you are interested.

~Brenteh

10-Jul-2008 02:05:23 - Last edited on 10-Jul-2008 02:07:47 by Patriotic Br

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