I really enjoyed this! You know, had you not told me that English wasn't your native language, I would never have known - your spelling and grammar are better than quite a few of the writers on these boards.
Your pacing and description were great. I particularly enjoyed 'As silent as a sabre-toothed kyatt' - you used a simile while relating it to RuneScape, which isn't something that I would ever have thought of doing. I applaud you for that.
I would encourage you to write some more shorts, maybe even a fully-fledged story! There are a lot of writing guilds on these forums that I'm sure would love to add you to their ranks.
Wintry
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