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Dark Enmity

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Gosh, am I tired from all those reserves. O_o

26-Jun-2009 03:17:38

Koolchicken1

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i haven't been able to read it yet, but when i do will i be able to review this as well?

i'd fill out all the app for you, then you'll be on my waiting list

26-Jun-2009 16:29:58

Dark Enmity

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Sure Kool, I would love it if you would review it, although I am only in chapter two, and there is a long way left.

26-Jun-2009 16:43:11

Koolchicken1

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i've got tonnes of reviews, by the time i'm at yours it'll probably be 20 chaopters :p

26-Jun-2009 16:53:38

Tava60

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Well Kyle I have noticed something in my readings. In the end of post 5 it metions Ivan's father talking with Ivan. But a bit later you reveal that Ivan's father left at Ivan's birth. I doubt Ivan could talk when he was first born, or have a classmate. But other than that good so far.

26-Jun-2009 18:45:19

Koolchicken1

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i've read the first few posts, and so far it's brilliant!

26-Jun-2009 19:17:57

Dark Enmity

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I see the spot were I said Ivan's father left him. I have revised this so his auntie Karen is having the converstation on his eighth birthday.

26-Jun-2009 20:03:03 - Last edited on 26-Jun-2009 20:06:05 by Dark Enmity

Tava60

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Ah good Kyle, much better. So doing good so far then.

26-Jun-2009 21:11:51

Dark Enmity

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Chapter Three is up! It's a long one, but I promise if you aren't hooked on this story, you will if you read the third chapter. It is way more full of action and twists than the first two.

26-Jun-2009 22:00:50 - Last edited on 27-Jun-2009 16:50:39 by Dark Enmity

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BardZaros

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I'm only on part 3 of chapter 1 so I just got started, and so far I think this is hilarious and interesting. Though I've been wondering, why are there jets and modern day Earth stuff in Runescape? Oh yeah and bump!

28-Jun-2009 02:09:50

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