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They hid behind a building each time a group of knights came on by. Once the coast was clear, they moved forward. They steadily made their way to the gates of Governanti, which was heavily guarded. With the bell at their backs, they sat there behind a building. There, Calvin looked over and counted the numbers. "One, two, three..." he began to mumble to himself. "...four, five, six, seven... Damn, this ain't gonna work. There's way too many of 'em."

"Wait..." Daevarro said. Calvin then turned towards the young man, once more he was intrigued. Daevarro then closed his eyes, he began to focus rather strongly on an image. The shadows of the night began to form a shape, a very familiar figure in fact. Calvin was caught off-guard by this, truly he became more interested by the moment.

From the floor to the ceiling, the shadow figure became a member of society. Or rather, a criminal against society. The dark-robed young man had made a clone of himself, a perfect copy. Calvin crossed his arms and smirked, awed by Daevarro's move. "Pretty neat there, shady." Calvin complimented, his voice sounded quite impressed.

The Daevarro figure then began to flee away from the two, not making a sound as it did. The knights guarding the gates rose their eyebrows, seeing the strange figure come out from the alleyway. ""A young man wearing a strange garb..."" the knight quoted. He then looked to his other knights, who also looked at the strange figure.

They all seemed to be reciting the same thing that this knight did. Their question turned into alert, seeing that the young man who just ran from the alleyway fit the description to the tee. "Hey, stop!" shouted the knights as they gave chase. The Daevarro figure began running the way that its creator had just came from. "Get back here!"
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All seven knights then rushed by the alleyway in which Daevarro and Calvin were hiding in. The way was clear, open for Daevarro to slip out of. Calvin then gave the dark-robed young man a gentle nudge. "Go on, shady," he told him.

Daevarro looked back at Calvin, he was smirked all the way to his right ear. The young man then took off Calvin's jacket and handed it back to him. "Th-thank you for your help..." he thanked, bowing his head.

"Anythin' for a fellow brother," Calvin returned, throwing his jacket back on.

""Brother"?" he quoted, unable to understand Calvin's gesture.

"Wait... you don't know? But those robes... " questioned Calvin, he then shook his head. "Eh, forget it, forget it. Go on, shady... get outta 'ere."

Daevarro then bowed once more. "Thank you again," he repeated himself. "Until we meet ag—"

"—Wait!" Calvin quickly said, taking the young man's attention. "Before ya go, I wanna tell ya somethin'."

"What?"

"When ya can," he continued to explain. "I want ya ta pay the Desert Assassins a visit. There, ya can seek out some answers about yaself -- about your family."

Daevarro seemed to tense up, his eyes getting sharper. "...What do you know about my family?" he questioned with an almost somewhat demanding tone.

"Guess ya gotta wait and see!" Calvin responded, spanning his arms out to his sides. But then he began pushing Daevarro away from him. "But right now, you gotta get yaself outta 'ere, shady! Those guards are gonna be on toppa ya real soon!"

Daevarro stood there, just outside of the alleyway. His eyes knife-like, staring at Calvin dead in his face. The lazy assassin didn't seem at all fazed, turning to his right. His pale blue eyes still gazed upon Daevarro. "Later," he spoke his one-word farewell, he then turned his back on the young man and began walking away.
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14-Nov-2013 20:06:50

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Daevarro was stuck in the mud of question, unable to put together the correct combination of ingredients to form his answer. Regardless, he knew he had to go. After a moment of staring at that assassin's back, the young man became reanimated. He began rushing as fast as he could towards the gates.

He passed right by them, being free of the city of Governanti and all the bad memories that it brought. He jumped through that stained glass window which held the image of the culmination of all of his nightmares in this city. He was released now, escaping to a free plain of verdant grass and flowing wind.

He ran forward, burdened by the tears that he had shed and the horrors that he had seen. But he was on his way, the gentle, Winter-like breeze at his back. His next destination would lead him to a city he heard so much about, a city he had barely seen with his own eyes. He made haste now, bolting for the capital of the Resistance.

The End of Chapter 14
Next Chapter,
Chapter 15: Faraway from Home

Thank you for reading! I appreciate it. ^_^

~Serene End

P.S: If anyone cares, I won't be posting a chapter 'round December. I've got to work on getting my GED, so y'know I can get started with my life! So I won't have much time to write. I hope you all have a very happy holiday and a very merry Christmas.
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14-Nov-2013 20:08:56 - Last edited on 01-Dec-2013 17:52:36 by Serene End

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Anabel writes on golden-brown paper, Soter's head turns to ashes (but he fights on later), fighting occurs. The fighting this chapter was much better than previous ones, much more interactive and lively. Lucia is back.

“they pushed open the jaws of the castle”
I liked this one.

Are you going to stand there like a lemon?

Balor's attitude swings about! Will he end good or evil? Only the end will tell.

"Indeed, the Elder Gods' fury would be biblical in size."
Heh, I didn't expect to see the word "biblical" here.

Orderer assassinated.

And I finish Chapter 13. I didn't offer much this time as I'm tired, and I don't want to trigger anything from other people. I'll try to read Chapter 14 tomorrow after work.

01-Dec-2013 01:14:40

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Woah... wasn't expecting to find this today!

''The fighting this chapter was much better than previous ones, much more interactive and lively.''

WOOHOO!

''Are you going to stand there like a lemon?''

Yep... I don't know. I just kinda had the urge to throw in the reference! xD

Relax, whatever you give is good enough for me. It could be but a word and I'd be all right with it! But thank you once more for your time and for reading. I really do appreciate it. As for the next chapter, I admit that it's kinda silly. Well, at least a portion of it. ...You'll see.

Anyway, thanks again. And dood, GET SOME SLEEP.

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01-Dec-2013 17:37:27 - Last edited on 01-Dec-2013 17:51:51 by Serene End

Azigarath

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I should have clarified that I posted that at evening after work, so I did have my sleep, just not a lot. I always have sleeping problems during the weekend. I resorted to drinking vodka before going to bed to get myself asleep, heehee.

At Walmart, I bought a 1kg chocolate bar. The company is Waterbridge. Not sure why I put that.

Anyways...Yes! A bird-masked, coat-wearing dude. Time to put frogs on cuts!

Attempted regicide doesn't turn out to work, but it was good to see a little rebel in one of the “badguys.”

Bar, slaves attack knight at Gallows' gallows.

I wrestled a bear once, a teddy bear that is.

A clone.

“With their heartbeats heavily drumming away in their chests, their pants appeared vividly in front of their mouths.”
The first thing that popped not my head was pants, as in clothing, in front of mouths. Silly me.

Anabel falls, seemingly needlessly, after speaking a mysterious language.

A guard is tricked by fatherhood, a brief escape through a cesspit and an alley, and the chapter's done.

I did notice a slight overuse of the “...”, and the combat does get a little repetitive however the repetition is alright. Villains should be a little more active in the fights, at least that's one suggestion. Character interaction was a bit odd a few times, reflecting your warning, but it's not really an issue. I did mention on the SD to a newer guy, that it is inevitable that all authors end up doing things they dislike, even when they like doing it. Sometimes, doing things we don't like helps us learn and develop as artists. No matter how silly, stupid, weird, pointless or unrealistic something may be, it's still work of the individual.

Well, that's all for tonight, then, I wait for the next chapter. Hopefully it won't take me more than a month to notice it when it's posted.

02-Dec-2013 01:33:08

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Don't worry, as I've said, whatever you put down is good enough for me. Y'know... now that you've mentioned chocolate, I want a Reese's Peanut Buttercup and some Haribo gummy bears (because gummy bears has everything to do with chocolate.) Uh, anyway! Onward!

''The first thing that popped not my head was pants, as in clothing, in front of mouths. Silly me.''

You wouldn't be the only one to have that moment... trust me. xD I think at one moment while I was rereading this part to myself, I had a slight giggle. It sounded so silly, but obviously it's not the clothing in reference. I had to keep it, really I did.

''I did notice a slight overuse of the “...”, and the combat does get a little repetitive however the repetition is alright. Villains should be a little more active in the fights, at least that's one suggestion.''

I checked back, inspired to seek out a count. And while doing so, in one of those segments, I noticed that it had four periods. So, thanks for that! But uh... Yeah, looking back, I definitely see that I really liked the periods in that chapter. I know why I did it though, I guess to perhaps add some sort of effect. But in the end, it might have just come out as a wee bit of an overuse. Though, calling it a wee bit might just be an understatement. xD

Villains will take more action in upcoming bouts. I, perhaps, wanted to give the soldiers some spotlight for once. I just thought while writing, "Oh, of course... let's hand the head honcho in the room the kill despite never taking part in the fight." I wasn't too happy doing that, so I fixed it. The ''bad guys'' will have more in the way of actions, especially later on. But right now, they're kickin' back and letting others do the deed. Oh, and some sound advice by the way. Indeed, it is very true.

Anyway, thanks once more for your time and for reading, I appreciate it.

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02-Dec-2013 04:51:53

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Here's a bump. And it's nice of you to finally post again, Azzy.

Edit: Myaah!

~ Seph,
the World Guardian
"How Can Mirrors Be Real If Our Eyes Aren't Real?" -Jaden Smith

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Myaaaaaaaaah!

Chapter 15: Faraway from Home

The drapes over his turquoise eyes peeled open, a ceiling of a blueish-white crystal nine feet above him. His eyes then shuffled, looking at his surroundings. He appeared to be in a room of sorts, a bedroom fit for a king. Portraits of regal men and women, images of lions and owls, and four pointed stars adorned the walls.

But something was off about those four-pointed stars, someone had taken a cutter of sorts and made them almost completely etched out. There was a statue in the room, one of crystal. It was of a man, clearly of power. His arms were spanned out, as if attempting to embrace something. But for yet another time, someone had ruined this piece of work.

The head of that statue was knocked off, it laid covered in dust far from the statue's left side. Its face was etched out, making it out to be a faceless phantom. Young Uriel quickly bolted up from his comfortable sarcophagus, realizing that he was in a bedroom. But none he was akin to being within, this was one he had never set foot upon.

The adamas that surrounded, completely encased this room. The decorations all over the walls, even the bed was something unfamiliar. Then the young boy quickly noticed another abnormality: his nose. He felt absolutely no pain, forcing his hand upwards to investigate. He planted it hard against what should be broken, but it was as if it was never even touched.

The boy was startled, fazed by this. The boy checked all around him, he appeared completely uninjured and untouched. His cloak was still over his arm, his clothing unsullied and even patched up. A large, shattered window was to his right. A cascade of the smell just before it rains filled the space the boy was in. Uriel sat up from the bed and began walking over to the window.
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31-Jan-2014 20:54:45

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His feet tapped lightly upon blue carpet, the carpet's edges trimmed with white. His right hand planted against the wall just at the window's rim, his left hand laying comfortably beside him. He peered outside, and he gazed into a place that looked as if it belonged in a fairy tale. He appeared to be about ten stories above the ground, he was able to see everything.

His eyes scrolled from what's just below him to what's furthest from him. Just below, a long pathway leading to a tall adamas gateway. This pathway was almost glass-like, so smooth and reflective. But it appeared like thousands upon thousands of shards of glass, which all ranged from size to overall appearance, were mended together. It was a long, shattered looking path that still retained its straightness.

Beside that pathway, a tranquil garden. It was blessed with strange flowers that appeared encased in crystal, coming in a multitude of colors. They glowed vibrantly, shining a light in any darkness. Placed about ten feet from the pathway was a row of these tangled, root-like plants that were as tall as trees.

They appeared very much like trees, but it was as if the tree was turned upside-down. It was a twisted spiraling mess of roots. They too were crystallized just like the plants and the castle. The root-like trees appeared in a wide range of colors, much like the plants. And they too glowed vividly. The row followed the pathway.

If there was any grass to be found in this large field of flowers and strange trees, it appeared like an azure blue. Once that pathway reached its end, it was greeted by adamas gates that appeared very jagged. And past those gates, a large and inviting city. Buildings of many shapes and sizes made up that world, all of them appeared to be covered in adamas. But from here, the boy could not see anyone.
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