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While the blade did manage to injury her hand slightly, the actual attack was an utter failure. All the rage bottled inside Shinon could not help him one bit against the princess. Still wearing her smile, she closed her eyes. The blade struggled to pierce through, it could not even begin to make a crack. ''Please, human...'' said Elena. ''Please do not make me laugh!''

Elena then launched her right foot towards the center of Shinon's torso. Her foot pounded against his torso. leaving him to let go of his sister's blade. His body flew several feet before finally landing heavily down upon the stone floor. His sword did cartwheels as it too flew into the air. It landed just a few feet from him, barely avoiding the edge of the rooftop.

Shinon attempted to stand but once again his body was too exhausted from the situation. He clenched his torso as an intense pain engulfed him. Several of his ribs were shattered like a window. Elena then twirled back towards the king, her brother. Her blade was still pointed at him, ready to kill within a moment's notice.

Elena's eyes popped open again, gazing down upon her brother's slightly glowing eyes. ''And now,'' she said, raising her sword into the air. ''vengeance shall be mine!'' Her sword then began to descend upon Balor. He quickly closed his eyes, shutting them very tightly. A drop of sweat then fell from his forehead.

After a few seconds, Balor noticed that he still had not been killed. He was still very much alive. He opened up his eyes and looked up at his sister's face. He noticed that she had stopped midway through her attack. She seemed completely frozen, like she had stared at Medusa. Her sword then began to fall from her hand. It hit the ground with a ding.
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Her eyes then began to fall down as if she were falling asleep. Her body then began to fall. She fell down onto her knees. Her vision began to blacken. ''Curse...'' she weakly mumbled, her voice but a whisper. ''...you.'' She collapsed onto the ground like a draw bridge in fast forward. Very worried about the well being of his sister, he quickly turned towards her and began shaking her.

''Lucia!'' he frantically called. ''Lucia! Are you all right!? Lucia!'' Both Raphael and Gallows ceased in their fighting and turned their heads towards the scene of Balor's desperate plead to his sister. Though it seemed that she had lost consciousness. Raphael was very concerned about her. He began rushing towards the two.

His face was hit by many sharp darts of water as he attempted to get to Elena. ''Elena!'' he shouted. But then, he felt something reach out and grab him. Gallows' left hand grabbed Raphael by the back of his head and lifted up off of his feet. Raphael squirmed around to break free from Gallows' grasp.

Balor then lifted Elena, carrying her in his arms. He held onto a teleport tablet with his left hand. Balor turned himself towards his general, his sapphire eyes gazing upon his bald head. ''Gallows!'' shouted Balor. ''We're leaving. Prepare for teleportation.''

Gallows acknowledged his king's order. He then quickly tossed Raphael away like a piece of trash. Raphael flew to Gallows' right, soaring several feet from the general. Raphael gained control of himself while in mid-flight, spinning his body so that his feet faced the ground. His body then landed onto the ground, he slid as his body ceased in its movement.
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06-Jun-2013 15:01:26

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He stood on one knee as he turned towards the king and his general. The reflection of Balor staring at Raphael with Elena in his arms appeared inside his eyes. A look unlike anything Raphael has seen on Balor appeared on the king's face. It wasn't hatred just because he was a human, it was pure resentment because of what he believed Raphael had done to his sister.

This different view of Balor appeared for just a few seconds as a shimmer of purple light quickly began to surround him. The purple light then began to take his shape, it devoured him whole. He was completely engulfed by this purple light, he looked like he had been painted entirely by a glowing purple ink.

With this light came the king's disappearance, he left Lumbridge as suddenly as he came to it. Gallows reached over to his left side. grabbing onto a horn that would mark the retreat. He held it in his mouth and began blowing life into it. His effort, his oxygen breathed life into the horn. A tune was then blown out, sounding simliar to a wolf howling.

This signal echoed throughout the raining day, alerting all of the Loyal Knights among the human knights of the command of retreat. Quickly, each knight ceased in whatever it was that they were doing and reached down to a teleportation tablet by them. Randomly, they each threw it down at the ground and the same purple light that engulf Balor swallowed them too.

And like a large space of players in an online game, they would disappear and logout of this battle. Gallows copied them, following the exact same thing they were doing. He too began to emit this light, and then quickly he would fade away. Shinon quickly crawled over to his sister's sword. He gripped onto it as tightly as he could before he threw his teleportation tablet.
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06-Jun-2013 15:10:08

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He was engulfed by the light before disappearing. The battle and invasion of the Imperial Kingdom into Lumbridge had finally ended. Without hesitation, Raphael got up off the ground and began rushing towards the more populated areas of Lumbridge. He came out of the rain, drenched by the rain and the blood of the battle.

But now was not the time for this. He quickly coursed through the veins of the castle and came out it's mouth. The tenebrous day greeted him once again with the tears of sorrow that fell from the eyes of the gods and those that have died watching the terrific scene play out. Raphael's ears caught the desperate cries and screams of those who call Lumbridge home.

In front of him, he can already see corpses line the streets. He seemed shocked, almost numb. He quickly began running as fast as he could to tend to those who have been changed forever by this day. Out of the walls that surrounded the Lumbridge Castle, his eyes widened at the sight of the streets.

The bodies, the death... all of it was so overwhelming.

Raphael then became flooded with emotion as he saw innocents injured, lives lost, and people and knights desperately and frantically attempting to find their loved ones. Rada, among the other nurses, were around tending to those who were injured. Uriel was around helping those injured as well. Adil and the other soldiers assisted as well.

It was a shocking scene, almost to the point where Raphael had thought it too surreal to even happen. But this was not a dream, it was a full-blown nightmare come to life. His heart became encumbered by grief and lament. He just stood there in the middle of this chaotic scene, unable to gather even the ability to move.
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06-Jun-2013 15:13:20

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Behind the distraught Raphael was a familiar face. Following loyally beside him was his familiar, known as the mighty Talon Beast. The young summoner stopped just behind Raphael. He then spun his torso towards his beast. ''I no longer require service of you.'' stated Telvern to his beast. ''Now... vanish.''

The Talon Beast let out a growl before it was enveloped by a blueish-white flame. Quickly, it melted away into nothingness. Telvern then fixed his eyes upon the back of his leader. ''All the Imperial knights have retreated.'' Telvern told Raphael. ''It seems like we're in the clear.''

A eerily silent minute went by despite all that was going on. The rain was all that spoke, landing safely upon the heads of those outside. It took a minute before sound finally reclaimed the air. Raphael sluggishly digested all that was going on. He closed his eyes, listening to all that twirled around him. He looked back at Telvern. ''We need to help.'' stated Raphael, suppressing his emotions. ''Telvern, can you summon anything that might help?''

Telvern reached into a pouch stuffed with all kinds of summoning pouches. He grabbed one in particular. In his right hand, a blue-ish-white light then began to shine. Suddenly, a shape of a horse then began to materialize just behind Telvern. A white stallion appeared then, letting out a cry as it was once again born into this world. It was a gallant Unicorn Stallion, its flowing hair shimmered as it stood there waiting for Telvern's word.

The young genius then turned towards the unicorn. ''Mighty steed of radiant shine,'' he spoke to the unicorn. The unicorn's head then pointed towards Telvern, its eyes glanced upon its summoner. A moment of silence went by as Raphael just stared without understanding what was going on.

The unicorn stared at Telvern. ''My master,'' it spoke to Telvern. ''Why hast thou awakened me from my slumber?''
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''Well, I'm sure the scene is enough to get you to understand.'' he replied. ''There are people around who would greatly appreciate your services.''

The unicorn closed its eyes. ''Very well.'' the unicorn acknowledged, comprehending what it was that Telvern summoned it for. Telvern then looked back at Raphael. The young summoner then began rushing off into the scene, ready to help anyone who would require it. Raphael followed as well.

From the chaotic and tragic scene of Lumbridge to the glorious gates of the capital of Governanti, the knights and men involved with the attack on Lumbridge began to recover in the aftermath. Inside the kingdom of Governanti, Balor carried his sister into a room he had not set foot in in over six years.

He walked into the room, the Loyal Knights closed the door behind him. They guarded the door with their lives. Balor stood in the middle of the room as recollections of past days came to his mind. It was a peaceful. cheerful reminiscence... full of memories he would never forget. He looked all across the room, noticing that had not changed at all.

The room appeared to have the width and length of the average house. There was a double door in the southern wall, the wall behind Balor. It led to a balcony that could view the entirety of the city and passed that. The walls were made of a dark gray marble. Pictures and family portraits adorned the walls.

Several tables were placed in different locations across the room, including the corners and the center left of the room. The floor was made of majorelle blue carpet which was made of the finest material. Balor closed his eyes as he looked up at the ceiling, it was an artistic and masterful piece of all kinds of decoration, sort of a Victorian style motif.
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06-Jun-2013 15:22:12

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Balor then looked down upon his sister's face. She seemed like she were sleeping in his arms. He smiled gently and warmly, the part of him that was missing for so long had finally been recoiled back into his heart. ''We're home, sis...'' he happily mumbled. He walked over to his right, stepping closer to a bed that his sister once called her's.

He then meekly laid her down in it, her head laid softly into the hands of the cotton pillow. He stared down at her face, still wearing that kind and lively smile. Balor then spun around, looking at what was facing his back. He then walked over to the table at the center left of the room. He then grabbed the chair closest to him.

He walked right back over to the bedside of his sister and placed the chair just next to the bed. He then slowly sat down in that mahogany chair and wait patiently for the moment her pale blue eyes would once again grace this world.

Several hours had passed since the end of that battle that took place in Lumbridge. The situation had settled down a bit, it was to the point where the soldiers and nurses had control of the order that was lost after their arrival. The rain had finally stopped, but the clouds still hung onto the sky. It cast a shadow across the world, catching the tune of today's events.

Raphael stood a top of Castle Lumbridge. He sat at the front center, his legs dangled off the edge. He sat there with his sword Falcon leaning against his left shoulder. His sword was hidden in its leather sheath. His eyelids were down, the images of a broken city reflecting off of his eyes. There were only so many things he could think of, and one of them was Elena.
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06-Jun-2013 15:26:07

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He seemed genuinely worried about her. The more he thought about it, the more it consumed his mind. A familiar summoner then appeared on the rooftops and noticed Raphael was there. ''Hello,'' greeted Telvern. This would go unanswered, ignored entirely by Raphael. Telvern began walking forward. He stood just behind Raphael and then lightly tapped the young man with his right foot.

Raphael quickly looked up at whoever kicked him and he saw Telvern, waving at him. ''Greetings,'' he once greeted the silver haired leader.

Raphael turned back towards the city. ''Oh, hello...'' Raphael quietly replied, his voice almost lost. Telvern sat down a few inches from Raphael's right. After a moment, Raphael reached a conclusion on what he was thinking about. He stood up, standing tall and firm. ''I know what I have to do.''

Telvern looked up, curious as to what he might be talking about. ''What exactly—'' spoke Telvern.

Raphael looked down at the genius summoner. ''Telvern,'' he named, his voice getting serious. ''I need you to watch over Lumbridge until I get back.''

''''Get back''?'' quoted Telvern with question. The young genius then stood up onto his feet. The two now stood face-to-face with each other. ''Don't you think this isn't exactly the best time for a field trip?''

Raphael looked away, his face turning towards his left. ''I have to,'' he quickly responded, answering Telvern. ''we need to get Elena back.''

''You're seriously—?'' returned Telvern before ending his words himself. ''Raphael... you do kno—''

''I do understand who she is.'' answered Raphael. A few seconds passed after he responded to Telvern. Raphael quickly turned his head back towards the genius. ''But that doesn't matter! She is a member of the Resistance... and I'm not going to abandon her because of what she is.''
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06-Jun-2013 15:30:53

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Telvern turned towards the ladder up onto the rooftop. ''As commendable as your beliefs are, sir,'' said Telvern, walking towards the ladder with his hands together behind his back. ''I don't think the others are so strong. Most of them are driven by the hatred and fury towards those calling themselves gods. And now that Balor has declared Elena as his long-lost sister, those of us following this hate will not be so kind to her. They... no, we now see her as an enemy.''

''The Resistance isn't out to kill all of the gods, it's out to change their laws and overthrow their rule.'' stated Raphael, turning towards Telvern. ''People make what their enemies are.''

''Yes, and we make all gods out to be our enemies.'' told Telvern to Raphael.

Raphael shook his head. ''Well, it doesn't matter.'' thought Raphael as he began walking towards the ladder. ''I'm going to get Elena back.''

Raphael then hasted passed Telvern. His eyes were closed, and he wore an intrigued smile on his face. ''Raphael,'' curiously called Telvern, causing Raphael to pause in his footsteps. ''Do you have feelings for her? Is that why you're acting like this?''

Raphael stood as still as night after Telvern's rather blunt question. His head fell down as he attempted to find the correct words to fit in his sentence back to Telvern. After a minute of just the wind blowing by, Raphael's head rose back up. ''...If people who have feelings for someone act this way,'' truthfully albeit somewhat nervously said Raphael. ''then... I guess I do.''

After admitting this, Raphael then began walking away from Telvern. He brushed off the feelings of nervousness and headed off to rescue Elena from the clutches of her brother. He was prepared to throw himself into the jaws of hell to not only save a comrade -- but more importantly -- save a friend.

The End of Chapter 9
Next Chapter,
Chapter 10: Confession

Thank you for reading! I appreciate it. ^_^

Hmm... feels pretty nice to be back. I hope it's 'til the end!
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06-Jun-2013 15:36:11

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Actually, I’m not good at debating either. But I decided to skip to your fifth story, which has length I like, so it should be a good read regardless if I enjoy it or not. I am guessing it’s ok the skip World in Flames 2 for now. I will also chop down the amount of feedback, commentary and criticism as best I can, but your story at first glance exceeds 200 posts, so I’m not sure how well I can do that.

So I begin with bios, a similar formula your first story has. I have also used the name Raphael in my own stories. His sword is somewhat flawed; gold is too soft and too heavy to be useful in practical situations. Perhaps you meant the hilt was gilded? Holding a one-handed sword with the blade down is not sensible, however, it is good for tackling a wall of pikes. Chinese swordsmen sometimes held their swords with the blade downward as to better deflect pikes and spears while charging. Raphael is revealed to have lost his family, though it is a bit odd that his mother disappeared, wouldn’t his father be there during birth? A fifteen year-old boy as a member of a council? That’s a bit young, but oh well.

Governanti reminds me of illuminati.

“Elena may use a Steel Longsword to defend herself from anyone attacking her from close range.”
Makes sense, but this is kinda obvious. :/

A bow made of strong wood is good, but a bow made of flexible wood is even better. The idea of Elena rarely missing a shot since childhood is even beyond realism, I’ve been practising with the bow since late childhood and I still miss most of the time.

“He wields a 29 inch long sword made of silver known as Silver's End.”
Twenty-nine inches is not a longsword, there are arming swords longer than that. A longsword would be at least forty inches. Silver is not a good metal for anything longer than a knife blade, it is almost as soft as gold.

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