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[#47C4ESKKK]

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Miscellaneous – 60/60
The majority of this portion is dedicated to originality, dialogue and whether or not I can sense that the writer had fun with the story. You scored perfectly in all three, in my opinion. As I’m grading dialogue on what the characters say, and not where in the story those statements are placed, I had to give you a perfect score there. Your dialogue was believable and funny, and, aside from a few strange things (Zachy), gave your characters a lot of much needed depth. I’m certain you had a lot of fun writing about the assassination of Spongebob—who wouldn’t?—and, as you know, there are very few stories that could rival the originality of this one.
Total Score – 245/300 – 82%
Just to recap, I enjoyed this story quite a bit Game. Its strong points were in its originality, characterization and grammar, as well as a great deal of good dialogue. Its weaknesses lay in a lack of description, and an abundance of weak verbs where there should be strong ones. If you plan to rewrite, just focus your efforts on adding description, slowing down your pace and reordering your sentences to put emphatic words at the end.

~ Corryn

19-Oct-2007 16:32:51

[#80N8R0VWZ]

[#80N8R0VWZ]

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I disagree with that, Spongebob and a karate-practicing astronaut squirrel is quite enough to make a story messed up XD

I finally got around to reading this, Game ^_^ Great, really. I disagree with Corynn on the description part, I thought it was quite good :) Not a perfect score, of course, but I always had a fairly vivid image of what was going on ;)
Anywhom, I really like this story :) Wish you'd write more ;)

19-Oct-2007 17:51:46

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