Well, I noticed that you made two new stories, so I just read them.
Your story about the current SC, The King is Dead, was a tale that brilliantly portrays conflicts, and the personification of using birds was a real attention-grabber. The Latin words, and names such as Rex which means king, also gave the story a strong moral feeling. Strange that there was no eagle, or maybe I just missed that as I am cooking so I couldn't read the story thoroughly. I feel that the religious/biblical and cultural references make the story a brilliant piece of art. I did not notice any serious issues.
The second story I just sort of skimmed through, as Crown of Flame kinda overshadowed it. You do mention how the rooster crows in the first sentence, which sounds a bit odd, because roosters don't crow, I think.
Well, not much time today, so that's all I have to say. I hope more people look at this thread sometime.
04-May-2012 23:45:41
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