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Caydock

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Nar and Ohta turned to the blazing jungle and ran into it to see what else they could do.
Ohta ran to a nearby tree, extended one head, and extinguished it with an icy snort from his nostrils.
He turned to Nar, a stricken look on his face. “It’s too late for this place; it’s done for.
Nar shook his head and turned to the once beautiful jungle. No more would he see the blossoming flowers, the graceful jungle trees stretching their boughs to the sky. No more talks with Maeg, Harma, and Dragon.
Suddenly, his ears swiveled into an upright position. Maeg and Harma!
He turned to Dragon, “Where are your parents?”
The look of shock and despair she showed galvanized him into action. He crashed through the bushes, hacking and coughing from the rancid smoke. His eyes started to tear up and heat leaped at him. Dragon gave a hiss of fear as a tongue of flame shot from the foliage and licked the tip of her nose. Ohta flew over the tree tops, sending ice and water over the ravaged jungle.
Nar heaved in a gigantic lungful of air, his vision clouded and he started to fall to the ground. Then a large blast of water showered over his head, bathing him in the crisp, clean feel of life.
Nar caught a glimpse of two jungle larupias lying prone on the ground. Flame caressed the tips of their tales and paws in white hot pain.
Ohta started to emit his ice breath, when he gave a small moan and collapsed upon the ground. A small, feather tipped dart was embedded in his scales.
Nar’s mouth dropped open as the dart’s owner leaped forward. Vazgim!
One side of his face was horrendously burned, the skin hung from it like some kind of grotesque growth, sagging loosely. One eye was almost lost in the seared, charred skin. And there was a cavernous hole where one half of his nose had been. One arm hung limply at his side and he walked with a pronounced limp.
Nar was aghast. This man could not die! Nar sent a stream of fire at Vazgim, but only succeeded in hitting the ground.

04-Sep-2010 19:44:13

Caydock

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Vazgim reached into his pocket and withdrew a fire rune and an air rune. “Give me smoke!” he cried as he threw the runes into a nearby bush. As the rank, putrid smelling smoke lifted up into the night sky, Vazgim disappeared into the cover of the plumes.
Nar looked wildly around for Vazgim, his body trying to dispel the fumes in his lungs. Nar heard a soft cry and turned towards the prostrate bodies of Dragon’s parents. Vazgim stood over them, the flames dancing on the stars on his elaborate blade. Blood dripped from the tip of it, and two large, gaping holes were evident on Maeg and Harma’s backs.
Dragon crept from Nar’s back and stared at her parents. Her eyes teamed with unshed tears and she let a howl of grief which carried to Nar’s tortured ears.
Vazgim dashed through the Jungle, attempting to avoid the inevitable wrath of Nar. Seeing Vazgim make his getaway, Nar slowly lumbered over to Dragon. Every second that he lived brought him pain and agony and the realization that he did*’t finish Vazgim while he had the chance was pure anguish.
Dragon looked up at Nar, tears glittering in her green eyes. Her ears were flat on her head and she whispered two words which seared Nar’s heart.
“They’re gone.”
-
Nar awoke the next morning to streams of sunlight. He opened his mouth into a large yawn. He rose to his feet and instantly the events of the night before crashed over him.
After all the human’s had left, Nar had tried his best to take care of Ohta. He had removed the dart and cleaned the wound to the best of his ability. Ohta had awoken moments later, and had assured Nar that he was alright. Nar had collapsed into a fitful slumber, teeming with nightmares.
Now the sight that greeted him when he was aware of his surrounding was enough to make him stop in shock. The trees and bushes were nothing but piles of ashes, still hot to the touch. The hills, once pleasing to the eye and crowned with emerald bushes, were now smoldering heaps of greenery.

04-Sep-2010 19:44:50

Caydock

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The whole place was a barren wasteland of charred stumps and smoking ground.
Ohta walked up to Nar. “My wound is healed. I thank you brother.”
Nar nodded curtly, still overcome with horror at the events of the previous night. His eyes roved the area and came to rest upon the many figures of the dead- birds, spined larupias, weasels, and kebbits.
Dragon strode over, her body drooping and her tail dragging along the ground. Nar looked down at her, full of sympathy for her grievous loss.
She looked up at him and said, “Wherever you’re going, I’m going too.”
Nar nodded his agreement, once again looking at the scarred tropical land. He sighed and turned to Ohta, “Where to, my brother?”
Ohta looked up at the clear blue sky; which clashed with the newly created inhospitable surroundings.
“We will fly until we have defeated our enemy… let us depart.”
-
Nar, Ohta, and Dragon left the next morning early. The preceding day had been filled with cremation of the dead. They had seen to the dead, and the injured, comforted the mourners, and helped the weary. Now they were ready for their duty.
As they took off, Nar’s heart was heavy. He knew that there was nothing more he could do- alas! It was what he could have done.
Ohta wearily flapped his wings, and he turned one head back to Dragon, who was perched somewhat precariously on his broad, scaly back. “How are you holding up, young one?”
Dragon blinked slowly, “Just fine, thanks.”
Nar turned to Ohta’s first head. “Just where are we going?”
“We are going to find our enemies. Small raids, large raids, unexpected deaths, hit and run, duck and weave. We will make our presence known to these humans, bit by bit.”
Nar flapped one wingtip, approving of the daring, yet subtle plan. “Let us start in that city,” he said, gesturing to a large landscape of buildings and sprawling fields.
“Agreed-we will make our move tonight.” Ohta’s brow lowered, “No man will be spared. Leave the woman and the children alone.

04-Sep-2010 19:45:14

Caydock

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We are not ruthless like humans.”
Dragon tried to lie down on Ohta’s charcoal colored back. As soon as she did she was thrown around by the rocking motion of Ohta’s flight. She gave a small hiss of disapproval, and settled into a comfortable sitting position. “How much longer?” she queried impatiently.
“You will be notified when we arrive there, oh mistress of the three headed.” Nar said, rolling his eyes in mock exasperation.
Ohta shot him a sharp look and murmured. “You think she could control me? I’ve eaten things twice as large!”
Nar chuckled, “Well then you must submit to them now.”
As the two dragons flew off, playfully butting each other, one pair of eyes watched from the trees below. Silently the creature darted off, to tell its master what it had seen…
-
A young girl lay in her bed, quietly surveying the quiet, black, star-filled Ardougne sky from the second story. She blew a small sigh of contentment and brushed her amber colored hair away from her sparkling green-blue eyes. Her father walked into the room; his chain mail glistening in the reflections thrown from the cozy fire that burned in one corner of her bedroom.
She looked up at him and blinked. “Daddy, could you please tell me a story?”
Her father smiled at her, unaware of the large dragon that loomed right outside the window. He sat down on her bed, his armor tinkling and bouncing with the movement, reached out to a nearby bookshelf, and grabbed a book. “Okay, how about: ‘Exercises for Gnomes’ by Ben Dover?
“Daddy!” the little girl said, leaning forward and delivering a sharp punch to his arm. “Be serious!”
“You know I have a battle with the Humans Against Monsters Agency of Ardougne tomorrow. We’re taking out the animals in the Forest once and for all. I’m as serious as could be.”
She rolled her eyes, “Daddy you can just say H.A.M. I know what it is.”
He winked, “Ah, but I did not know you were that wise, my daughter… Ouch! You must not strike your father!”

04-Sep-2010 19:45:44

Caydock

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She fell back with a yawn. “Get on with the story then!”
“Okay, here we go…”
Suddenly Ohta blasted through the window, roaring his battle cry and sending jets of white-hot flame flying everywhere.
The warrior caught fire and blazed like a human torch. His cries of pain were drowned out by the shrill, staccato, shrieks of the young girl. Ohta blew even more flame, ending the knight’s plan to destroy animals forever.
As Ohta flew away into the night sky, the young girl ran to the window and clambered out, dropping to the shingles of the roof. She looked back to the flame blackened body of her father, great sobs threatening to overcome her. She stared at Ohta’s receding figure and the shadow of another large dragon spewing flames over other residences. She vaguely noticed the Knights of Ardougne and the H.A.M. members preparing to engage the dragons in battle. The cries of “innocent” civilians assaulted her ears, and her head fell between her knees as the tears flowed…
-
Nar released a tongue of fire at a nearby Knight of Ardougne. He turned from the blazing inferno and hurried to Ohta’s side. “Knights are coming, brother. We must face them.”
Ohta whirled one head towards the direction of tramping feet and clanking metal. Let’s go then…
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END

04-Sep-2010 19:46:10

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Very good story! I'll admit that when I started it, I wasn't too impressed. There was punctuation and grammar mistakes all over. However, you obviously improved in part two, and I love it! Good storyline. One thing that I would really like is a bit more description. Things seem a little rushed. All in all, I'm hoping for the next part!

04-Sep-2010 21:59:23

Englishkid62

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^ If you knew at what age he'd written that, maybe you'll think differently. At least, at that age I couldn't write anything anywhere near this good.

04-Sep-2010 22:05:11

Caydock

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Thanks for reading.

And yes, you're right; the description was lacking, something I've hopefully remedied in the two years since this came out. Unfortunately I don't know if I'll ever complete it.
Hey English.

~Caydock

05-Sep-2010 00:29:16