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Poller5
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"A lot" is always two words; an alot is something much, much different.
Anyway, this is a great piece. It's very well written, despite being very oddly written; it's not my favourite style, but it certainly demonstrates a great ability to craft language.
Keep it up.

06-Jun-2011 01:11:27

Nguy4

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Well first off, thank you for the kind words Poller!
It means a lot (notice my impeccable spelling!) to me that it's coming from you. It gives me some self-esteem in this work of mine. Hopefully, I'll keep on adding! :D
And yes, I've already changed my "alot" typos :p.

09-Jun-2011 04:41:01

Borna Coric

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I read this last night but neglected to post. Just wanted to say that I really enjoyed this intellectual and abstract work. It is certainly a good change to what we normally see on the Stories Forums, so thank you for the entertaining read.

10-Jun-2011 07:18:52

Dewl Dragon
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There's something really soothing about this. It's like a neverending (assuming you'll be adding more (I hope)) poem that simultaneously takes us through what you experience and what every other person on the planet has experienced. I really like that you vary between themes from your own life that only relate to you and then go right to a more universal feeling.
One thing stuck out to me in particular, about boredom being another state of being, not something we should seek to remedy... I'll have to think of it that way next time I'm bored. I'll have you to thank.
I hope I can come back here and see more posts :) Keep it up, this is great.

23-Jun-2011 05:52:59

Rancher

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Wow. I don't know what to say. It's great on so many levels. And you have to give a hand to CannedNoob97's first two posts. The second one nearly made me fall over laughing. He was the comic relief in that great insight of yours.
I really like post 8. It was really deep. It could be made into a poem. But it would have to be a free verse poem. I don't like free verse poems. But I'd like this if it were a free verse poem. I guess I make up my rules as I go along. I should write a free verse poem now. Just because I hate them.
EDIT: Oh my gosh. I just wrote a free verse poem! I'm a free verse poet and I didn't even know I had the ability to be one!

24-Jun-2011 21:57:25 - Last edited on 24-Jun-2011 21:58:01 by Rancher

Nguy4

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WOW! Thank you so much guys! These comments really do move me alot. It gives me so much motivation to continue to add on to this thread. Thank you so much. It's the greatest feeling ever when you know your working is actually affecting people. It's what all writers aspire to do. Thank you again.
iPlayRL,
Thank you for posting! Well first off, don't get bored too often! I don't like being in that state very much either :p. But it's an interesting thought. I hope I'll have more adds for you the next you come back!
Rancher,
Thank you so much for you kinds words! Post 8 was really a shift in tone and texture thus far. Much more lyrical and figurative from the regular stream of consciousness. So to an extent, sorta a free verse poem! :p. I'm also quite happy that you've unlocked the beauty and joy of free verse, and more broadly, poetry in general! But free verse harder than it looks. Some people say it's as constricting as any other poetry form! Anyways, thanks for posting! Hope I'll have more for you to read in the future.
Pious,
Thank you for your succinct, wonderful comment! Hope I have more for you in the future ;D

25-Jun-2011 08:19:37 - Last edited on 25-Jun-2011 08:27:24 by Nguy4

Rancher

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Hm... First off, the thing about writing a free verse poem was a joke... More correctly, it was a meta-joke and depends on the knowledge of a previous joke/saying. Just to clear that up. :P
That aside, I actually write a lot of poetry (I'm going into a career in create writing), so I'm not new to that field. But for the most part, I have a bit of resentment directed towards free verse poetry. I just don't get it. Even free verse poems by poets whom I really, really like--such as Robert Frost--don't appeal to me.
I have written a free verse poem once, though. And another one, sort of. (I'm not sure if I fully consider the other one a poem or not... Again, not my style.)
I could explain why I dislike free verse, but that's another conversation for another day. My point is that free verse is certainly not as constricting as other poetry forms. And I'm sure that's why it appeals to so many modern poets (even poet laureates now write primarily in free verse), but I really think that a poem that is free verse loses some of its potential beauty.
And I'm not saying free verse is always bad. I realize that some musings--especially short ones--flourish without barriers. But poets start to run away with that "no restrictions" idea, and the result often does not a poem make.
I guess it's just personal opinion though. And until I'm world autocrat, there's nothing I can do about it... :P

29-Jun-2011 01:41:30

Nguy4

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I understand your aversion against free verse, but let me see if I'm convincing:
Poetry is the condense expression of experience. It's saying something in the least amount words possible. So whether it is a sonnet or free verse, we should not judge a poem's literary merit purely on the rhyme scheme or consistent rhythm. Free verse is less constricting in respect that it has no set rhyme or meter, but it is no less demanding because you are still trying to say something with least amount of words. Free verse is liberating and daunting at the same time. You see, with established forms such as a sonnet you can always fall back upon the form, while free verse you have everything at your disposal. In effect, its arguable that it is easier to write in a scheme than to not write in one because of the sheer freedom you have. Moreover, free verse poets recognize the aspect of rhythm and take that into consideration in their unit of rhythm, the line.
If poetry is truly saying something within the least amount of words possible, then forms such as the sonnet or the villanelle act as straight jacket of expression because it neglects the true expression of meaning. Instead of expressing what you really want to say, you have to invert that within the confines of meter and rhyme scheme. That's not to say that a sonnet is no less poignant than free verse. It just goes to show that different poetry styles have different applications and benefits. Perhaps because of the constriction of the sonnet you express meaning within the least amount of words possible and that its all the more harrowing and resonant because of the rhyme scheme and meter. And that's true for Shakespeare to Keats. But ff you are going to write a good poem, it is going to be hard regardless of form. You are still going to deal with rhythm, sound, imagery and figurative language. T.S. Eliot attests to the fact that free verse is no less easier than the sonnet and it can be as powerful and resonant as any poem.

29-Jun-2011 22:03:07 - Last edited on 29-Jun-2011 22:10:24 by Nguy4

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