Great adds, I really did hate the captain as he basically left his mate dying there.
One thing, however, is that in one paragraph, you described him as barely awake and exhausted beyond measure. Then the next, he threw a throwing axe perfectly into a man's head with no effort.
Haha. You do realize, it's me with all the sadistic ideas since I'm narrating the story? Therefore, you're asking if you can be like me. The answer: No. Phool.
*Lurv*
Just curious, do think I'm worthy of a spot on the Top Ten authors of TC?
--Guard
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