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Slay Orc 681

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Well, it's a good review, though taking away a point per error is a bit harsh. Also, try to look for factors that would tell about a person's personality. You did that with Uvedin, but you didn't do it with Joran very well. Other than that, I can't really think of any more advice.

--Guard

31-Dec-2007 00:15:49 - Last edited on 06-Jun-2008 23:28:04 by Slay Orc 681

CaptChekaka

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Thanks.

I'm going to fix up my review format.

Oh, and by the way, 'The Treasure of Raduon' has earned an 'A' recommendation. Check the review thread under 'Stories Reviewed'.

~ Capt

31-Dec-2007 00:17:36

Slay Orc 681

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Many thanks, effendi.

Swordsman, are you almost done yet?

--Guard

31-Dec-2007 00:31:24

Slay Orc 681

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Alright, I fixed all of the errors.

Just curious, are you going to change the review because it actually *did* show Joran's emotion?

--Guard

31-Dec-2007 00:36:10

CaptChekaka

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Erm...

I'm not sure. XD

I chnged it for an error in grammar... but, I dunno...

~ Capt

31-Dec-2007 00:37:11

Slay Orc 681

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You know you want to...

*Holds out a freshly baked, homemade chocolate chip cookie*

--Guard

31-Dec-2007 00:38:22

CaptChekaka

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Umm...

~ Capt

31-Dec-2007 00:39:02

Scoucher

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Number One Review Rule: Never take bribes. Although the cookie here and there is acceptable.

31-Dec-2007 00:40:01

CaptChekaka

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...

Eh.

*Steals cookie without changing*

~ Capt

31-Dec-2007 00:44:32

Slay Orc 681

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I anticipated that, and so I implanted a remote-detonated bomb inside the cookie that would move through your digestive track without causing any problems should you change it. However, since you refuse to...

*Holds up a bomb remote*

--Guard

31-Dec-2007 00:46:06

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