CaptChekaka Posts: 35,595 Sapphire Posts by user Forum Profile RuneMetrics Profile The drip part seemed a little out of place when you described it. I don't know if it can be done any other way, though. So, it made the piece seem more stressed. To me, at least. ~ Capt 28-Dec-2007 01:01:36
Slay Orc 681 Posts: 5,039 Rune Posts by user Forum Profile RuneMetrics Profile The dripping part is my favorite. I shall not remove it. --Guard 28-Dec-2007 01:02:29
CaptChekaka Posts: 35,595 Sapphire Posts by user Forum Profile RuneMetrics Profile Not the dripping part. The part where you said it was blood. The suspense worked well and then it hit that part. Boom. Gone. You worked your way up to a spot that seemed odd, or out of place. Not the drip part in whole. The part where you described it. ~ Capt 28-Dec-2007 01:04:39
Slay Orc 681 Posts: 5,039 Rune Posts by user Forum Profile RuneMetrics Profile So how do you reckon I can change it to keep the suspense going? --Guard 28-Dec-2007 01:05:40
CaptChekaka Posts: 35,595 Sapphire Posts by user Forum Profile RuneMetrics Profile I don't know... That's what I'm trying to think of... >.< ~ Capt 28-Dec-2007 01:06:54
Slay Orc 681 Posts: 5,039 Rune Posts by user Forum Profile RuneMetrics Profile Did that revive the suspense? --Guard 28-Dec-2007 01:15:18
CaptChekaka Posts: 35,595 Sapphire Posts by user Forum Profile RuneMetrics Profile Yes, much better, ~ Capt 28-Dec-2007 02:10:44
Dudeski Posts: 4,891 Adamant Posts by user Forum Profile RuneMetrics Profile Hah, cool. Suspenseful, as Capt said . 29-Dec-2007 00:54:18 - Last edited on 29-Dec-2007 00:54:54 by Dudeski
Chuk Posts: 14,177 Opal Posts by user Forum Profile RuneMetrics Profile I have heard that You are craving a review. If I am able to, would you like to be the recipient of my second review EVER. 29-Dec-2007 03:50:13
Slay Orc 681 Posts: 5,039 Rune Posts by user Forum Profile RuneMetrics Profile I would love to. --Guard 29-Dec-2007 03:53:45