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Nice job, Chekaka!
Your little interruptions work better than I normally expect such devices to work, though I admit that my favourite part was "...and no workman’s comp."
No wonder Santa's days were numbered.
Good luck in the contest,
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16-Nov-2007 09:46:56 - Last edited on 16-Nov-2007 09:49:34 by Dreamweaver

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I like it :) . Deep *nods*. Although I think it would be better if you took away the "Crash. Devestation. Death." part at the end. I think (and this is just my opinion) the "Ho-Ho-Ho..." works better. Oh, in the last post, you have "reigns". Should that not be "reins"?
Other than that, great story! :D
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16-Nov-2007 10:07:05

Joppi J

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Hmm...
First off, your little interuptions were unecessary. They were just throwing the moral down people's throats. You should be good enough to make them realize what's happening without interupting their reading and telling them what's happening.
Sorry, but I doubt a story about Santa getting murdered with "blood raining from the sky" will really fly in a story contest about Christmas.
Just my opinion, maybe I'm wrong. But it seems that Jagex goes more for less-violent stories.
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16-Nov-2007 11:50:26 - Last edited on 16-Nov-2007 11:51:36 by Joppi J

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It's still good, even if it isn't "Jagex's type" :P . I like it anyway.
O_o ~Iso the Galantous Blob, a Potato Sack?~74 Days~Dubbed 'nub' by Zap, WKC, Star, Snake, Die, Pat, Orby, DieS, Dudely, Scout, Bed, Haru, Siggi, Tet, Scou, Mb, Zep, Auro, TNR~Capt

16-Nov-2007 11:58:54

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Blumpage.
Where exactly does this fit into RuneScape?
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16-Nov-2007 22:27:26

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Ah yes, Elves. Those little creatures from the deep, how I hate them so much...
(Quote that or die)
O_o ~Iso the Galantous Blob, a Potato Sack?~75 Days~Dubbed 'nub' by Zap, WKC, Star, Snake, Die, Pat, Orby, DieS, Dudely, Scout, Bed, Haru, Siggi, Tet, Scou, Mb, Zep, Auro, TNR~Capt

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