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Old Gnomish
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Old Gnomish

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I've finally read everything you have posted so far. It's an interesting couple of chapters so far: I am glad you are not rushing through it too much -- hopefully it could become quite a lengthy and interesting novel. :)

Your use of description is of a high quality, and in terms of figurative language you probably demonstrate one of the best uses of it in this forum.

Just be careful not to go to that point where it becomes too focused on gore; sometimes, it can detract from the overall effect of the story. Obviously it is needed in a story such as this but don't overdo it: there's nothing worse than a clichéd story.

Anyways, that's all for now. Be sure to updated me when you add a load more to it -- I have terrible tendencies to procrastinate. ;P

EDIT: Oh and I enjoyed the scene where it turns out he is dreaming. Confused me at first, but that's probably because of the false sense of security created when I thought it was real.
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07-Jul-2012 21:32:41 - Last edited on 07-Jul-2012 21:34:13 by Old Gnomish

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