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The Fate of Romeo

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Supreme Pac
Dec Member 2008

Supreme Pac

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Wow this is...amazing! I haven't seen this type of talent on the forums in a long time. This was amazing :D better than anything I've written so far I'd dare say...

You should check out The Word owned by Dreamweaver. It's the unofficial chat for story forum writers but let me warn you..we're extremely crazy in there and do offend "outsiders" quite frequently but that doesn't mean you shouldn't stop by

28-Dec-2010 01:37:48

Marvellous
Apr Member 2009

Marvellous

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I must say, Laurazal!

You truly deserve an award for this work!

Unfortunately, all I have to offer is perpetual praise.


I very much enjoyed how well you expanded on the characters of Runescape, especially the tramp, who I will never look at the same again. Also I applaud how well you intertwined the initial story, especially the dinner scene; it was truly magnificent.

You are wonderful at creating transitions in which I, myself, can view easily as a cut-scene in my mind.

And finally, the way you blend the many activities and quests accessible in Runescape into a spectacular storyline is beyond brilliant.

Well done, Laurazal.

Please, do write another!

31-Jan-2011 06:44:09

Darelzel

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Thanks for the kind words.

I was deliberately emulating the 'storytelling' cutscenes with the transitions. And it sounds like I succeeded, there.

As for the tramp, yes it always bothered me that the tramp who hurls fruit at the cages doesn't have a 'talk-to' option. I suppose there's a programming reason for it, or maybe he's just not meant to stand out but just be there for atmosphere, but I was looking for really unlikely information sources in this story, and he fit the bill.

As for another story, well, I do have at least one idea in mind. It's more of a holiday-based idea, and I don't know when or if I'll get around to writing it.

01-Feb-2011 15:10:45

Feenix Lynx
Feb
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2002

Feenix Lynx

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I think it's a great story.

You managed to write several stories that explain the removal of the characters, while incorporating some references to the play in each act. I had to look up a couple of the quotes to be sure they were from the play.

I like the ending where Romeo and Juliet end up married with new names. This is what might have happened in the play if fate had not chosen a different path for them.

05-May-2011 01:21:41

Mexk
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Mexk

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It's really really good!
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05-May-2011 16:04:00

Jimothey
Apr Member 2010

Jimothey

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Very nice story! Although, it's also a collection of theories of the true made-up story behind the departure of Romeo and Juliet. Out of all the stories I'd believe, it would be the last one. Here's a comedic story/theory that I came up with:

Quoted from a sleepy drunken hobo, washed up from the river Lum:
"It was a usual night, Romeo sleeping... wherever he sleeps..., Juliet, Phillipa, and Draul Leptoc were sleeping in their house. That was, when suddenly, here it comes: ALIENS! They pulled the four, plus me, in their ships with their tractor beams! The other four were being probed, as there weren't enough probes to probe me. Suddenly, the four changed their shapes, and I saw on a computer-thingy that their memories were being replaced by other randomized memories; Romeo turned into a dwarf, Juliet into Gundrun, Her father into the champion guy, and Phillipa into Gundrun's sister! Her sister wasn't seen in the story because she was somewhere else, probably picking up groceries. Gunthor was told by the aliens in human form that were off the ship in human form that Gundrun was his long-lost daughter! Then, the four were lowered down with the tractor beam into the barbarian village. How did I know about the long lost sister thing and how did I get out? I looked out the window to see who the aliens were talking to. To get out, I broke out from the stretcher they held me in and jumped through the window! That is what happened to Romeo and Juliet. Either that or I'm crazy and they moved and accidentally left their stuff behind."

me: I believe your second story better. And how did you know I was doing the quest, and why were you in the river, practically sleeping?

Drunken man: I saw your quest journal dangling from your pocket. I was conscious at that time. As for the second question, I fell in the river when I exited the ship, and I was left unconscious. I came conscious again a few hours afterwards, but then I kept getting hit in the head by fishing poles.

(cont.)
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10-Mar-2012 06:11:35

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