The stories I usually read hadn't updated yet, so I went on a search for a good story. Like I normally do, I scaned pages of the story forum until I find a thread that for what ever reason, peaks my interest. The age of Nhur was one of those threads.
I was a little late to the party, so I didn't post on that thread, But I loved that the "main character never dies"rule wasn''t in your story, so you had to read, rather being able to asume plot lines. This created a darker atmosphere to the world your descriptive writing brought to life. I finished the age of Nhur not to long ago, And I'm extatic that you continued the story line.
Although when I first read your story" age of Nhur" it was very dry and difficult to understand at the begining, Almost making me stop reading. I know that you were trying to reveal senarios and characters slowly, to create a misterious enviorment, but you put too little details with too much going on. That was resolved shortly into the middle, through more enviormental information and knowing what the heck a character was doing, rather than guessing most of it.
You have improved on this in your second episode, so it feels like a mistery, rather than a fill in the blanks (little bit harsh there).
Other than that I would like to say that I like what you have going here, with your writing style and such. I'm looking forward to seeing more of the "red garbed man"( was it Z?). I still feel bad for arial from AoN though...
25-Aug-2011 04:52:35