I don't always do this, but you've got lots of potential kid. Haha. Let me give you a list of possible things to look at, considering I just feel like helping you out. To prove my credibility, I'm a graduate of Royal Signature Academy. Here I go!
Your tranitions betwee line to line seem a little flat. Using ¸‹´ seems a little robotic and wooden. Posiibly using ¨°•¸ from line to line or some other variant could help you you out.
Also, for one thing, your shading is not very....diverse. Youe seem to just use ;;;;;;;;;;;;::::::...... and sometimes, that just looks plain. What I like to do is make a ratio, that I use loosely. Sort of like this:
For every 5 ;s there will be 3 :s and 4 .s. So it looks like this.
;;;;;:::....
When stopping one form of shading, in the middle of a line like this:
;;;;;:::.... ;;;;;:::.....
looks a little weak. To cure that, just use a lot of :s and :s anf then graduallly use less and less periods seprated with a space, like this...
;;;;;;;;;;::::::...... .... .. .
That way it looks like it's been slowly vaproized or dissolved.
That's all, thanks for reading.
04-Nov-2010 21:37:18
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