Thanks Jube
I'll be writing a bit more quite soon. (I'm kinda busy on two stories that I just made. Their names are Short Stories and Resurrection of a Hero if you're interested.)
I couldn't really understand that, but I think that you're saying that you don't like the story. Well, please tell me what's wrong with it, I'd like to know. If I know, then I can make it better and maybe I'll get to LIVE mother status.