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Fall of Saturn
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Review for The Fall of Saturn by Dellading
Spelling/Grammar- 30/30- I don't see any mistakes. This looks like a perfectly proofread story. Nothing more to say here.
Description/Vocabulary- 28/30- I liked the way you described the area throughout the whole thing. I could picture Tyler's embarassment when he saw Caroline with sweaty pits lol. The main characters were barely described, which bothers me a bit. I like being able to see all of them and not have to create a design in my head myself.
Plot/Fluent writing- 30/30- Ok, that was one of the most different plots I have ever seen. It kept me in to the whole story and I liked it even though it takes place in the future. I like reading stories that take place in the past, or in another world. But this was great and it flowed very well so it was very easy to understand.
Character Development- 28/30- Some of the characters seemed a bit mysterious and not known much. It was a bit weird. I did like how Tyler had all those mixed emotions and everything. It was great.
Organization- 30/30- I have nothing to say here, this was an easy 30/30 for you.
Overall- 146/150- This story is way different from anything I have ever read. The way you wrote it though just kept me reading it and it was so awesome how you wrote everything. I'm speechless, I don't have much to say. This is definitely going on my recommendations. I hope this review will help improve your already great writing
Spelling/Grammar- 30/30- I don't see any mistakes. This looks like a perfectly proofread story. Nothing more to say here.
Description/Vocabulary- 28/30- I liked the way you described the area throughout the whole thing. I could picture Tyler's embarassment when he saw Caroline with sweaty pits lol. The main characters were barely described, which bothers me a bit. I like being able to see all of them and not have to create a design in my head myself.
Plot/Fluent writing- 30/30- Ok, that was one of the most different plots I have ever seen. It kept me in to the whole story and I liked it even though it takes place in the future. I like reading stories that take place in the past, or in another world. But this was great and it flowed very well so it was very easy to understand.
Character Development- 28/30- Some of the characters seemed a bit mysterious and not known much. It was a bit weird. I did like how Tyler had all those mixed emotions and everything. It was great.
Organization- 30/30- I have nothing to say here, this was an easy 30/30 for you.
Overall- 146/150- This story is way different from anything I have ever read. The way you wrote it though just kept me reading it and it was so awesome how you wrote everything. I'm speechless, I don't have much to say. This is definitely going on my recommendations. I hope this review will help improve your already great writing
30-Jun-2007 17:39:49
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