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Englishkid62

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As promised, here's the beginning of Brotherly Love.

~~Brotherly Love~~

‘When it’s gone, you'll know what a gift love was. You'll suffer like this. So go back and fight to keep it.’ ~Ian McEwan, Enduring Love, 1997.

Chapter 1
He was the kind of teenager whom, when asked privately, would reply without hesitation that his life was not worth living and he wanted to kill himself. If only that were possible. Even when depressed, so very depressed, to commit suicide required the kind of courage he knew he did not possess. Nobody needed him; nobody would particularly care if he were gone. He realised that the world had reached a stage where ultimately, it would carry on without him. No one told him why he must live on, why he was important, though at heart he’d much rather there be a reason. He was lost, and he has yet to find himself a purpose to continue. But by staying, doing nothing about it, he felt he was doing his family a favour of some sort – a charitable act surely, with its rewards at the end. It occurred to him that he was living solely for other people, while he himself had little reason to carry on. Was the key to existence to be found in our relationship with others? Why was he living for other people, when he should be living for himself? And, amongst other things, why should he be nice to others, when they weren’t nice to him in the first place? These were questions that, at his age, proved too much for him, and he’d long given up trying to find the answers, believing with a fierce conviction that they did not exist. Or even if they did, they were probably silly.

21-Apr-2010 20:38:10

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No longer did he find novelty, or intrigue, in daily life, like how the dust, suspended in mid-air, moved along with the tiniest, invisible currents of air movement under the sunlight, and the soft tapping noises of a pigeon walking on grass. It turned out the world had no secrets, and nothing exciting at all. For a thirteen-year-old, he thought himself more cynical and deep, more wise and knowing, than others of his own age. The others never saw the world his way, and were mostly uninterested to pursue the meaning of life. Even his older brother, Edward, who was always happy, who must have done an awful lot more thinking on the subject than he had, never seemed to be troubled by these higher mysteries at all. He came to the conclusion that maybe he was the special one, the unique being in this world, although not so lucky now that he was stranded in a world full of shallow people, surrounding him like an impenetrable wall, drowning him. No wonder he was depressed. But, despite having told his family on multiple occasions that he suffered clinical depression, an illness that certainly demanded immediate attention and fear, they didn't really believe him.

~~End of Snibblet~~

In other news, I have completely failed to write Chapter 2 today, because I couldn't get into the right mindset for that particular scene. Better to wait until inspiration hits than force myself to write something mediocre, eh?
You may comment on the above if you wish, please bear in mind it is still a work in progress.

21-Apr-2010 20:38:23 - Last edited on 21-Apr-2010 22:33:25 by Englishkid62

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Yeah, at this time, I'm about 5 words into the next chapter. I think this story will be very difficult to write :|
Difficult, because I think in many ways it will rival, if not surpass The Priceless in depth, plot, and emotion, as well as literary devices. It might just have been a project too ambitious for me though. Dunno yet.

22-Apr-2010 16:04:35

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Last post from me for today.
NEWS:
The Priceless, and and the first chapter of Brotherly Love will be posted in A.H., and the latter will be regularly updated with new chapters there, to encourage readers to participate in the process of its making. The finished version will be posted here when this thread reaches 500 posts.
Bye all!
(For more information on A.H. you need to chase up Cosmic or Caydock).

22-Apr-2010 22:24:07

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Just finished reading it and all I can think is: Wow.
Let me get this straight, the story is supposed to be sad at the ending right? Why I ask this, I thought it is too good to end so quickly. But it IS a sad story.
Here are my final thoughts.
First:Homer-> Then:Shakespeare-> Now:You :P

24-Apr-2010 22:30:01 - Last edited on 24-Apr-2010 22:30:25 by [#7X97CJT81]

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Hey, Caydock, thanks for dropping by and I'm glad you liked the excerpt. You can of course read the rest of that Chapter in your-know-where :P
But it is at the moment an unbaked pie, so it needs some time in the oven, I guess.
Edit: Wow, just fixed another three errors in this story. Maybe this wasn't so well baked after all :|

24-Apr-2010 23:43:58 - Last edited on 25-Apr-2010 00:28:57 by Englishkid62

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