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Tom the Free

Tom the Free

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-sits uncomfortably until Friday-

Is it Friday yet?
What about now?
Now?
Is it time yet?
What about now?
Hasn't your evil mind come up with something yet?
Now?
Yet?
Oh come on.
Tommy used to work on the docks, unions been on strike... -gets slapped-

08-Aug-2007 04:51:17

Sir Azrien

Sir Azrien

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Time taken to review: 0 hours, 19 minutes, 57 seconds

Plot: 20/20
Organization: 20/20
Grammar (Spelling, punctuation, grammar): 20/20
Word Choice: 20/20
Flow of Story: 20/20
Total: 100/100

Comments: The plot is entirely original, especially for a RuneScape story. Description really goes a long way in this story and I'm sure the unedited version must be four times more gory. Organization is very noticeable with the inclusion of a table of contents, which many people neglect to do recently. The way you separate dialogue also shows your expertise in writing. Spelling, punctuation and grammar are all very well done, editing it must have helped greatly. The word choice is phenomenal and sets up a very vivid and captivating mental picture. The story flows exceptionally well, which is usually hard when switching between many characters. I'm sad that this review is so short but you leave me little to criticize or correct. Excellent work.

Mistakes: None.


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08-Aug-2007 09:14:47 - Last edited on 14-Aug-2007 07:58:44 by Sir Azrien

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