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My comments: This is the best horror story I have ever read. Well, it's the only horror story I've ever read, but if stories could scare me, this one definitely would. Well done, and also, if someone says 'I hated it' you could say that they were just saying how much it scared them. I.e. all comments are good
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Plot: 20/20- What a...evil...plot. It's great and I just wish I could've read the first one. From what I heard it may have created a slight unease in my stoumach (that would be weaker people wetting their pants
). A great plot and Georgi dying? Who could've predicted that?
Punctuation/Spelling: 18.5/20– There were a few mistakes, but not many. Overall your grammar was good, I would just re-re-read through the posts your re-writing/en. I don't think there's many other thing i can suggest, you're just that good of a writer
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Description/wording: 20/20- Excellent. I could picture each of the freakish scenes clearly in my mind. The non-horror parts were pretty good as well. But, more horror and lees...err...non-horror...
Flow: 18/20- Your flow was mostly good. Just a bit jumpy here and there, it wasn't very noticeable, but well, I noticed it
. It'll be interesting to see how Allison can handle the flow of the horror all on her own. We'll see
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Typo's: 9.9/10- There was the one typo I could find. I know you've corrected it but I have to pretend you haven't seen my review yet. So, that's 0.1 point off. I think you take your time writing, so there won't be many. Anyway I'll stop rambling and get on with the rest of the review.
My opinion: 10/10- I absouletely loved this story, and I can't wait to read the rest of it. I hope you post/have posted 40 more story posts so you can apply for another review.
Extra credit: 19/20- It appeared that everyone either loved this story, or were freaked out by it, bth are good
. As this is (to the best of my knoowledge) the only horror story on the forums, you could really go places.
Total: 115.6/120
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Plot: 20/20- What a...evil...plot. It's great and I just wish I could've read the first one. From what I heard it may have created a slight unease in my stoumach (that would be weaker people wetting their pants
). A great plot and Georgi dying? Who could've predicted that?
Punctuation/Spelling: 18.5/20– There were a few mistakes, but not many. Overall your grammar was good, I would just re-re-read through the posts your re-writing/en. I don't think there's many other thing i can suggest, you're just that good of a writer
.
Description/wording: 20/20- Excellent. I could picture each of the freakish scenes clearly in my mind. The non-horror parts were pretty good as well. But, more horror and lees...err...non-horror...
Flow: 18/20- Your flow was mostly good. Just a bit jumpy here and there, it wasn't very noticeable, but well, I noticed it
. It'll be interesting to see how Allison can handle the flow of the horror all on her own. We'll see
.
Typo's: 9.9/10- There was the one typo I could find. I know you've corrected it but I have to pretend you haven't seen my review yet. So, that's 0.1 point off. I think you take your time writing, so there won't be many. Anyway I'll stop rambling and get on with the rest of the review.
My opinion: 10/10- I absouletely loved this story, and I can't wait to read the rest of it. I hope you post/have posted 40 more story posts so you can apply for another review.
Extra credit: 19/20- It appeared that everyone either loved this story, or were freaked out by it, bth are good
. As this is (to the best of my knoowledge) the only horror story on the forums, you could really go places.
Total: 115.6/120
05-Aug-2007 04:06:05 - Last edited on 02-Sep-2007 10:22:15 by [#DTGU0KGCF]
lol np
05-Aug-2007 04:08:13
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