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Logan Shafts
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Logan Shafts

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Also, page 2 post 8, you wrote:
"His mother opened the door into the triage unit, and the cries of wounded soldiers was suddenly overpowering. Aletayr covered his ears and buried his face against his mother's should, not daring to look."
I believe you meant "shoulder", not "should". Beautiful scene though (emotionally, though it's actually quite gruesome/gloomy).

21-Jul-2011 15:32:55

Logan Shafts
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Logan Shafts

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Well, healer seemed fine since it is a more medieval themed story. Otherwise you could use Physician, or maybe even apothecary.
You might also google what doctors were called in the middle ages to get ideas. It's not really that vital though, mostly just an observation.

21-Jul-2011 15:39:11

Logan Shafts
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Logan Shafts

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Oh, haha. Fair enough. I don't think it really damages the story any. Doctor and Healer both work fine probably, despite them having slightly different connotations. The reader who misunderstands will only do so by their own merit (or lack there of). =p

21-Jul-2011 15:48:49

Logan Shafts
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Logan Shafts

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Well if you're worried about it, you could always just remove the 'doctor' and 'healer' bits altogether.
For instance, instead of "we're going to see the doctor", one might say "we're going to get you fixed up.", or "we're going to get you taken care of." etc.
Has the same basic meaning, but avoids the questionable word.

22-Jul-2011 06:33:51

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