Annie, I think your bio is better in APTtS (A Path Through the Skies), but you seem to struggle with a realistic sense of reasoning behind the features of the backstory.
For example, it's risky and stupid for a father who is a member of the military to send his young daughter alone to an airline, and I doubt the personnel would just let a young girl walk in without a guardian.
You also mention she has green hair, and I assume she dyed it.
The bio seems to allude to an evil uncle, and since the father is a military ambassador, why doesn't he just contact the military or social aid of some sort for help? Someone fire him!
I think it'd be much simpler if Annie's past was left blank, and that she is a runaway or stowaway, and sneaked on-board.
22-Jul-2017 04:00:56
