Top-hole story, you're a dem fine writer, I'll give you that. I wouldn't necessarily put this down as one of my favorite stories, but it was definately one worth reading. I love how you actually show us the feelings and desires of the character, unlike most stories with bland, unimaginative characters.
Your descriptions do however lack that vivid, entrancing imagery that I look for in writing. You could of described the appearance of the dagger, and maybe perhaps describe the crime scene a little bit more. You did a relatively nice job with everything else, though.
You are a rather talented writer, and I hate for you to waste it on such a meager forum-community such as this, where people can plagiarize your works and gain profit for it. I strongly suggest you take your magnificent writing talent elsewhere, where you can perhaps make some good money with it.
-Sincerely,
Labryinth
21-Jun-2010 03:18:09