Ok, I'll say this, it was a great scene. You used great description and explained all of the emotions perfectly. One of the best fight scenes in first person I've ever seen. I've never been that good at reviewing, so this is my short review.
That was totaly awesome!! I dont care what anybody else says! I saw it perfectly in my minds eye and felt some of his pain. but i was kinda dissapointed when there was no more to read lol. anyway i love it, all of it
<Finish The Fight>
Hehe, i'm back Roshi! and thanks GREATLY for bumping my story while I was away
I was planning on reading any adds, but it seems I've run outta time ---gotta go to soccer trainin' lol
I'll read it tomorrow, first thing
Thanks again Roshi!
Thanks Bane and Badboy
It's nice to get good feedback on something you don't think you did that great on.
If it's coherant and you can see the fight in your mind, then mission accoplished.
No worries Wolf, and your welcome for the bumps.
I finished up add number 18 - it wasn't quite finished before.
I wanted to write more, but there wasn't enough time today. It should go fairly quickly from here to the end though.
It is nearing.
Hey Ms. Roshinda! I'm just bookmarking this spot for my profile. I will - as you know - await the end of this tale with keen trepidation, then read it with profound interest!
Dreamweaver
Thanks Jband. I know it was short, I apologise. I was too busy yesterday getting an onyx, but I got one.
Dream, This should be finished by the end of the month, I hope. But slave driver that you are, it may take a bit longer now
NAh, the ending is getting close. I think. In theory anyway. When I write it it may take longer than I forsee though.