That's nice. Decent little plot. Some typical errors on the technical aspect (like where Katrina says "I'll stop try to stop the glitch."
, but they're not really bad.
You mention that there are six people infected. So far, all I have are Katrina, Siegfried, A, and Adrian. Who are the other two? Where are they? I want to know about them. Also, I wonder what any of the eight who declined the glitch think about the events that have taken place lately... and does the glitch still affect them?
I don't know. Tell me.
Thanks for the comment Para!
There was one part of a chapter involving the two mystery characters. So far I've explained very little about them. They're a mystery...Woo!!
The eight who declined...Um...Went to bed that night and forgot all about it? NOT MADE UP ON THE SPOT.
Nothing important happens to the eight. They lost the glitch and went about their daily lives. I just had them there because I thought it'd be odd that only six people would be targeted and two pairs out of six knowing each other.
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When you started you said six players kept the glitch, but only listed four motives. The other two people are the remaining glitch users, right? I hope they come in soon.... And please throw in some gore, I love nightmares!
If you just read the recent adds you'd know that Adrian can now choose how he wants people to die...
I've briefly mentioned the two others in chapter three I think it is. They will come in later, don't you worry!
P.S. If you like Gore + Nigthmares, then you'll definately want to read my other story Nightmare.
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