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Lord Revan57

Lord Revan57

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This story is too similiar to DeathNote. I admit that this is a good story, and its very well written. But, its just too similar for my tastes. Make it a bit more original.. For example, A is too much like L. While A'* role is not that of L, their personas are very similiar.
~Rev~

13-Nov-2008 22:11:15

Levinski5

Levinski5

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Page 30, at the bottom of post two:
"Then all three of them formed and triange around Wide Eyes, leaving him no one to attack and nowhere to run. A chuckled, and spoke."
"Then all three of them formed A TRIANGLE around..."
I do believe that is what you mean, forgive me if I am wrong. :|
I'm lovin' these new adds by the way.

14-Nov-2008 11:14:29

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