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My comments: - This story blew me away, I loved it. Although it was based mainly around a fighting scene, it was still deep. Excellent work and I will definitely continue reading.
Plot: 17/20 - An good plot, but slightly over-used. The whole good-bad fight has been done, but you added a few of your own elements to it. Good work.
Punctuation/Spelling: 18.5/20 - This was an excellent element of your story, there were few mistakes (That I could find) and I hope you continue to keep up this excellent (almost
) error-free story.
Description/wording: 19/20 - Excellent description throughout the whole story. Your fight scenes were brilliant and you always had great character development.I found this to be one of your best traits.
Flow: 16/20 - The flow wasn'y too bad, just a bit jumpy. If I review the chapters after this post, the story may runa bit smoother. Good luck.
Typo's: 9.9/10 - There was one typo that I found and it's posted below. I was shocked when I found so little mistakes, and I hope to be able to write as well as you when I get around to writing one
.
My opinion: 10/10 - Can't fault you here, I loved it. I was thinking of reviewing the rest of this story, but I thought it might be unfair, but, that doesn't matter as you've got a great score anyway.
Extra credit: 17/20 – Almost everyone I've seen here have loved this story, and I believe that it can only grow in popularity. Well done and keep writing!
Total: 107.4/120, this score entitles you a spot in my High Archives.
Mistakes (if any): Here are the few I found:
"I though I made it clear last time we met what the plan was," = thought - page 3
My boy, there is no need for you to bow to use, = us - page 6
of shamans was far great than the number of elven magi = greater - page 21
Bolts of light flickered from his outstretch fingers, = outstreched - page 27
Plot: 17/20 - An good plot, but slightly over-used. The whole good-bad fight has been done, but you added a few of your own elements to it. Good work.
Punctuation/Spelling: 18.5/20 - This was an excellent element of your story, there were few mistakes (That I could find) and I hope you continue to keep up this excellent (almost
) error-free story.
Description/wording: 19/20 - Excellent description throughout the whole story. Your fight scenes were brilliant and you always had great character development.I found this to be one of your best traits.
Flow: 16/20 - The flow wasn'y too bad, just a bit jumpy. If I review the chapters after this post, the story may runa bit smoother. Good luck.
Typo's: 9.9/10 - There was one typo that I found and it's posted below. I was shocked when I found so little mistakes, and I hope to be able to write as well as you when I get around to writing one
.
My opinion: 10/10 - Can't fault you here, I loved it. I was thinking of reviewing the rest of this story, but I thought it might be unfair, but, that doesn't matter as you've got a great score anyway.
Extra credit: 17/20 – Almost everyone I've seen here have loved this story, and I believe that it can only grow in popularity. Well done and keep writing!
Total: 107.4/120, this score entitles you a spot in my High Archives.
Mistakes (if any): Here are the few I found:
"I though I made it clear last time we met what the plan was," = thought - page 3
My boy, there is no need for you to bow to use, = us - page 6
of shamans was far great than the number of elven magi = greater - page 21
Bolts of light flickered from his outstretch fingers, = outstreched - page 27
04-Aug-2007 12:35:41 - Last edited on 02-Sep-2007 00:23:34 by [#DTGU0KGCF]
I've been away for a few weeks on holiday. I'm back now, and this battle is as good as ever! Keep it up.
12-Aug-2007 15:06:37
Bump from page 30.
14-Aug-2007 09:53:32
No, I don't; and this isn't the place to ask. I'm fairly sure that you can see that I'm not on the actual Academy thread, also. But thumbs up to you if you use it; 'tis a great place.
Bump.
Bump.
16-Aug-2007 16:29:32 - Last edited on 16-Aug-2007 16:33:31 by Mattman875
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