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Bump.
Thanks for bumping, Ruben.
~Caydock
Thanks for bumping, Ruben.
~Caydock
04-Dec-2009 16:59:22
You're welcome
07-Dec-2009 22:05:38
Thank you!
~Caydock
~Caydock
08-Dec-2009 15:14:26
Heyyyyyyy. So, I'm a bit tardy, but here it is. You review from Full Circle Reviews!
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>Plot – 37/40
Pace: 19/20
-Perfectly paced until the last chapter, where you fly through sections that you should’ve taken your time to depict fully.
Content: 18/20
-I can’t make much of a judgment with so little revealed, but it seems very promising. Lots of tasty light/dark archetypes, and I’m very interested to see how mirrors factor in symbolically. This story has excellent potential.
>Characters - 31/35
Interaction: 18/20
-Very much above-par, but there were a few times where I was getting the dreaded “Nobody actually talks like that” impression.
Development: 13/15
-Cadoc seems like an interesting character, as do they all, but it’s still too early to make a lot of judgment.
>Description - 26/30
Character: 13/15
-Lacking in general, although it is not bad. I never got a very good picture of Cadoc himself, or Ruben.
Setting: 14/15
-Extremely well done throughout.
>Style - 21/25
Voice: 14/15
-It’s not incredibly distinct, but it’s there, and that’s about how it should be.
Consistency: 7/10
-You kind of lose it a bit at the end, so I can’t rate you too high here.
>Mechanics - 19/20
Syntax: 14/15
-Good, but could be better. Try to be more aware of repeating words, and avoid doing it.
Spelling: 5/5
-Perfect as far as I could tell.
>>>Overall - 134/150, or 90%
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rbie
__________
>Plot – 37/40
Pace: 19/20
-Perfectly paced until the last chapter, where you fly through sections that you should’ve taken your time to depict fully.
Content: 18/20
-I can’t make much of a judgment with so little revealed, but it seems very promising. Lots of tasty light/dark archetypes, and I’m very interested to see how mirrors factor in symbolically. This story has excellent potential.
>Characters - 31/35
Interaction: 18/20
-Very much above-par, but there were a few times where I was getting the dreaded “Nobody actually talks like that” impression.
Development: 13/15
-Cadoc seems like an interesting character, as do they all, but it’s still too early to make a lot of judgment.
>Description - 26/30
Character: 13/15
-Lacking in general, although it is not bad. I never got a very good picture of Cadoc himself, or Ruben.
Setting: 14/15
-Extremely well done throughout.
>Style - 21/25
Voice: 14/15
-It’s not incredibly distinct, but it’s there, and that’s about how it should be.
Consistency: 7/10
-You kind of lose it a bit at the end, so I can’t rate you too high here.
>Mechanics - 19/20
Syntax: 14/15
-Good, but could be better. Try to be more aware of repeating words, and avoid doing it.
Spelling: 5/5
-Perfect as far as I could tell.
>>>Overall - 134/150, or 90%
~
rbie
Lorehound
through and through.
11-Dec-2009 05:39:35 - Last edited on 11-Dec-2009 06:04:26 by Orbestro
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