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Crystal Smee

Crystal Smee

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Then the natives disappeared. They faded back into the jungle, and just like that, it was over. They were completely alone in the jungle, spinning around with weapons drawn in a sea of bodies. Lucas lowered the bow, arms quivering, and waited for a moment, but there was no resurgence. They were really gone.
He dropped to his knees, quickly taking stock of himself before turning to the wounded. A few minor scratches, but nothing else. He turned to Rohan first, who was bleeding profusely. The **** in his leg was right above the knee; a clean stab wound. In his pack, Lucas found bandages and bound the injury tightly. Rohan would walk with a limp for awhile, but it would heal. He straightened and saw Sorokin a ways away with Dusty. With his splinted arm, Dusty had troulbe moving still, and he’d taken a blow to the stomach. The next man Lucas turned to lay with his eyes wide open and unmoving, and it was easy to see he was long dead. His blood had already begun to dry around the arrow lodged in his shoulder.
The last soldier, propped up on a rock a few feet away, followed Lucas’ gaze. “He dead?”
Lucas nodded wordlessly.
“He was a good man. Those arrows are something, huh?”
“I’m sorry,” Lucas said. “What about you? Where are you hurt?”
The soldier leaned forward, grimacing, to show a large bleeding scrape on his skull. The skin had pulled apart and he could see blood pulsing from the wound.
“You need stiches, man,” Sorokin said from behind Lucas. He hadn’t heard him approach, as he was too busy scrambling for bandages upon seeing the man’s injury.
Lucas said, “Stiches?”

09-Sep-2011 22:51:05

Crystal Smee

Crystal Smee

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“I thought you read books, scholar boy,” Sorokin teased. “You sew the skin together. Otherwise it won’t hold closed, you know?” The soldier made exaggerated gagging noises at the description. “Oh be quiet, Athyr. You’ve done this before, you know you’ll live.”
“Do you have the supplies?”
“Limited.” Sorokin sunk down to his knees. He produced needle and thread from a pouch. “Pull it together for me, Lucas.”
Lucas tried not too look as Sorokin stitched the skin back together. He knew he should watch, but watching Sorokin calmly slide the needle through skin was too much. The medic was deft, and it was over in just a few minutes. When he was finished, he helped Lucas to his feet and wiped his hands on his pants. “Come on. There are more that need our help.”
The two medics moved off into the jungle to find the other wounded.

09-Sep-2011 22:51:25

Sir Camzo

Sir Camzo

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Nice adds :) I've got a lot of free time at the moment, so here's the spelling mistakes I came across while reading the last 5 posts:

Post 1
“They felt so safe in his cae, they began to forget about the natives altogether; “ Forgot an “r” in “care”.
“The squad had gown complacent in their easy days of walking.” Add an “r” in “grown”.
Post 2
“They found with spears, he noted, as he struggled to get closer.” I’m assuming you meant to type “fought”?
“The long thrusts of the spear kept him at bay * they were skilled fighters. “ No idea what got censored out.
Post 3
“Then he saw the bow and arrows on thenative’s slender body, and he snatched those up too.” There should be a space between “the” and “native’s”.
“Sorokin ran off as Lucas shouldered the quiver and noc*ed an arrow.” The “k” in “noc*ed” got censored out, a simple (c) to fix it.
Post 4
“ The **** in his leg was right above the knee; a clean stab wound.” Censor again.
“With his splinted arm, Dusty had troulbe moving still, and he’d taken a blow to the stomach.” Miss-spelled “trouble”.
Post 5
None.

11-Sep-2011 19:22:28

Crystal Smee

Crystal Smee

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So, it's that time of year again where I'm headed back to school. I wanted to give anyone reading a heads up because the amount of adds will decline, as usual...
I keep trying to convince myself, "Oh, I'll have time to write. I'll MAKE time." The reality is that like pretty much never happens. As always, I will TRY to write, and I will be thinking about this story a lot, and I'll write little snippets and lines of dialogue when I'm bored in class...but there won't be many substantial adds. I apologize for that. But life is busy, and it's hard to make time for writing, no matter how hard I try :\

14-Sep-2011 04:02:02

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