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30-Jun-2012 03:22:47 - Last edited on 30-Jun-2012 04:09:22 by One Hot Stud

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//DOCDATE 23JUN2009\\
*Come hither! Come hither!
Proudly stride unto me
Do not fear the horrid weather
for I have sights for you to see
Do not fear the brooding
of angry clouds up high
Instead imagine feuding
brothers in the sky
Do not fear the thunder
or lightning flashing bright
Imagine pirates plunder
and cannonfire's light
Do not fear the fast streams
of mighty swirling gusts
Imagine them as grand dreams
leaking from our earth's crust
Do not fear the fierce storm
There is nothing there to fear
Use the thoughts now newborn
just because you ventured here*

When I was a boy, my grandfather used to recite this poem to me when he saw I was afraid. It made no sense to me then. It took years after his death for me to finally take meaning out of those words. It's not the best poem I've ever read. Any high school english student can quickly dismantle the piece and pick out every bit of misplaced grammar or uneven flow or incorrect word placement.
However, the meaning always stuck with me. I can safely say that it influenced what I saw when I looked out upon the world. It told me to use my imagination to shape and craft the sky, the people, and even the very earth below me. Something as slight as a spring storm can be reimagined into wonders that only the mind can manufacture.
My older brother grappling me as I wrestle him in the living room. The scuffle started with a joking slap to the head and it will end shortly with me suplexing him through mom's coffee table.
A salty seadog captain taking a merchant ship by force with his band of cutthroats Robert Louis Stevenson style. As last cannonball crashes into the battered boat, a victory cry can be heard when the merchants drop their cutlasses to the deck and give up their plunder in exchange for their lives. There's parrots everywhere.

30-Jun-2012 03:26:16

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The very essence of the planet we all stand on swirling and tugging as the invisible wisps rush past my face. Like the thoughts and ideas spinning through my head at any given moment in time.

I tried to join the military when I realized that my eight years of college didn't give me the education or advantage I needed. Plus two hundred and fifty thousand dollars is hard to pay off, even with that piece of paper stating that I knew enough aerodynamic and biochemical engineering from the greatest minds alive to get a job anywhere in the country. No matter where I went with my suit and tie and
briefcase, no company would even give me the courtesy of returning my calls. Then I applied for a spot in the Naval Academy. I knew, just KNEW, that they wouldn't turn me away. They needed bright young minds to convert into the officers of tomorrow. I stepped into that bright office, with the pictures of old, decommissioned boats and a big flag posted on the wall.
They took one look at each other.
Then they turned me away. No questions...no answers.
I simply walked back out of the building that day. Simply too dazed to even argue. Then the man with the dark suit seemingly materialized out of nowhere, handed me a card with a phone number on it, and disappeared as quickly as he had appeared.

One phone call and twelve years later, I have broken through. The lock has given way and as the key slips from my fingers to the ground between my feet, I am ready to step through the gate...and I will bring the whole world with me. For the betterment of all.
But those who funded and those who helped me achieve my goal of a united globe silently slid the key into their breastpocket, as I willed myself to take that first step. When I realized their intentions, I was already being hauled away. Dragged from my plans and my Utopia. Dragged helplessly as the new keyholders conspired upon the corruption of the devices from my mind.

30-Jun-2012 03:30:04

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I'm writing this today because it needs to be written. I've escaped the confines of that ****-hole they threw me in. I know the faces. The names.
The system.

And I'm going to take back my key. If I don't, not even my imagination will stop them from abusing what's been unlocked. I can only hope that this letter gets to someone somewhere. Anywhere.
I have also attached a sixth stanza to the poem above. I wrote it years ago. It doesn't quite fit with the rest, but I personally feel that it keeps with the ethos I've adapted and used to power my work. I hope that someday it will be impact others the way it impacted me.

*Do not fear the unknown
It is what we believe
The mind will be the home
of all ideals we retrieve*

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30-Jun-2012 03:32:55

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If you have somewhat large questions after reading my entry (pertaining to the plot), then I did things right =D
Also, I refuse to apologize for my potty mouth. I managed to only put in one curse word and that's reasonable enough. Dock me as you will.

30-Jun-2012 03:47:40 - Last edited on 30-Jun-2012 04:10:24 by One Hot Stud

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I do hope there's more room for judges? I've run out of time again due to undesirable circumstances.
You wanted a biography of sorts on various reviewing credentials I understand?
I have been around the story forums for a considerable amount of time now and been reviewing for around six of those years. I have held four contests in this time, all of which have been successful and the latest involving over sixty reviews going over a two month period.
As a previous owner of the Novelists' Guild I also conduct frequent and lengthy reviews that go into great detail on stories of similar length and can not only rank entries accordingly but also offer insight into how to improve.
I took part as a judge in the "King is Dead" contest prior to the current one where I demonstrated detailed feedback on each entry.

Did you want more than that? I can supply such if you so desire.
Good luck to everyone. I'm really annoyed I ran out of time again...
Especially to you, Yrolg. ;)

30-Jun-2012 16:08:44

Yrolg

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There is a tactic in American football of running out the clock. I am apt to accuse you of the same, Lebbeh. :P
I'm sorry you weren't able to get an entry in. I am always welcoming of increased competition as it spurs us to grow and develop as writers and a community.

30-Jun-2012 16:46:09

Cozmic

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One Hot Stud, This contest doesn't have any special rules concerning swearing, so you'll just need to follow the forum rules. Those say that you can't bypass the censor or use an uncensored swear word against someone (a real person, not a fictional character) offensively. Unless you did either of those things, which you most likely did not, then you'll be fine.
Sir Snyder3, It'll be fine, as long as we can tell who it is by the context.
Lebbeh, Sure, you can judge.

30-Jun-2012 17:14:41

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