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There is more, as I've previously stated lol.
And Jayaster is right. At the beginning of season 4 I said Saradomin imprisoned Zamorak when she no longer had a need for him which was when the Noob went to ScapeRune which was 50 years ago.
I'll look into all the mistakes... but Jayaster could you possibly list the posts they were in? lol that would help some
And Jayaster is right. At the beginning of season 4 I said Saradomin imprisoned Zamorak when she no longer had a need for him which was when the Noob went to ScapeRune which was 50 years ago.
I'll look into all the mistakes... but Jayaster could you possibly list the posts they were in? lol that would help some
23-Mar-2009 04:43:11
Fianlly, someone with decent grammar in a noob story.
27-Mar-2009 01:07:51
ah no be on deh fan list :,(
ok light lord. I'm gonna review your story now. I've allready read it once, so i'm just gonna kinda skim it. I should be done by tomorrow, assuming nothing comes up.
page 2: more im leaning
I'm
Kay, light lord, i'm gonna get to page three then i'm gonna stop. The only thing that'd keep you out of the hall of godly stories are grammer mistakes. Make sure you go back and revise your work
page three:
luckily, I stole a commander's uniform from the lockerroom. UNFOURTUNATLY, the guy at the front door saw through my plan, and saw that i wan*N't (need an "N" there)
Somewhere around page four:
"ahh! Mr. Noob, Glad to see you came in a hurry." "I *pant* don't *pant* know what *pant* your *pant* talking about *pant" "lets get down to business Mr. Noob, im sure you're aware of the upcoming war" "OMG THERE'S A WAR!?!?" "Yes... it was said yesterday...
You should put some space in there. Like this:
"ahh! Mr. Noob, Glad to see you came in a hurry."
"I *pant* don't *pant* know what *pant* your *pant* talking about *pant"
"lets get down to business Mr. Noob, im sure you're aware of the upcoming war"
"OMG THERE'S A WAR!?!?"
"Yes... it was said yesterday..."
This will severly hurt your overall grade and your reading ease. By about....... ummm, lets say .000000000000000001 which rounds down to 0.
I didn't have any trouble reading it, but others might. Just to let you know it will not affect your grade. (like i said. I had no trouble reading it)
I'm currently on page 5
ok light lord. I'm gonna review your story now. I've allready read it once, so i'm just gonna kinda skim it. I should be done by tomorrow, assuming nothing comes up.
page 2: more im leaning
I'm
Kay, light lord, i'm gonna get to page three then i'm gonna stop. The only thing that'd keep you out of the hall of godly stories are grammer mistakes. Make sure you go back and revise your work
page three:
luckily, I stole a commander's uniform from the lockerroom. UNFOURTUNATLY, the guy at the front door saw through my plan, and saw that i wan*N't (need an "N" there)
Somewhere around page four:
"ahh! Mr. Noob, Glad to see you came in a hurry." "I *pant* don't *pant* know what *pant* your *pant* talking about *pant" "lets get down to business Mr. Noob, im sure you're aware of the upcoming war" "OMG THERE'S A WAR!?!?" "Yes... it was said yesterday...
You should put some space in there. Like this:
"ahh! Mr. Noob, Glad to see you came in a hurry."
"I *pant* don't *pant* know what *pant* your *pant* talking about *pant"
"lets get down to business Mr. Noob, im sure you're aware of the upcoming war"
"OMG THERE'S A WAR!?!?"
"Yes... it was said yesterday..."
This will severly hurt your overall grade and your reading ease. By about....... ummm, lets say .000000000000000001 which rounds down to 0.
I didn't have any trouble reading it, but others might. Just to let you know it will not affect your grade. (like i said. I had no trouble reading it)
I'm currently on page 5
27-Mar-2009 15:39:01 - Last edited on 28-Mar-2009 02:45:26 by Pigwig70
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