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(¸.•´ (¸.•The Secret's In The Frosting
Raymond stood lonesome and depressed while staring around his empty house. There was no hustling bustling conversation going on over by the buffet table, no party games occurring in the living room. Just Ray and his feline friend, Dr. Whiskers.
To be curt, his entomology party was a dud. It didn't take a scientist like Ray to surmise that people were somehow repulsed by him. He sulked over to the table covered with food and drinks. When he was gloomy, he ate.
Carefully he cut himself a thin slice of homemade pie, complete with an elegantly ornate crust. The filling was made from vibrant burgundy cherries. Ray was about to stuff his face with the delectable pie when an ant collapsed out of the side with its long slender feelers.
'That’s right,’ Ray thought. ‘I am sad to.’ He looked at his plate affectionately and then gulped down his pie, ant and all.
People never understood the fascinating quality of bugs like Raymond did. As an entomologist, it was his art and passion. He contemplated that reflection while digging into the veggie salad, complete with a few dozen brown ticks crawling around on the lettuce.
The pink lemonade punch had dead bees to add to the flavor. Bright blue scarab beetles were gently coursing through the lasagna. The tarantulas were making thin silk webs in the doughnut holes. Ray quickly popped one into his mouth, hearing the crunch from the spider when his upper and lower teeth connected.
“Why would people want to miss this?” Ray asked himself in bewilderment. He shrugged it off and looked at Dr. Whiskers with admiration who was gently gnawing on steak bone swarmed with centipedes.
'Well, nobody’s coming. Might as well make the most of your food.' Ray had to agree that this had turned into a disaster. Miserably he collected his giant three tiered purple cake and set it on the table.

06-Jul-2009 18:54:55 - Last edited on 06-Jul-2009 18:55:28 by Dark Enmity

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The silver knife gently cut into the top level of the cake, letting out an eruption of cockroaches, scampering around the icing and soon claiming the outside of the cake like little soldiers claiming a battlefield.
“Ugh, that’s disgusting,” Ray said with revulsion. “To think that I put such a small amount on my main attraction."
He grabbed a nearby box full of his favorite insects and poured them out, watching them joyously flood his cake.
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06-Jul-2009 18:56:04 - Last edited on 06-Jul-2009 20:07:21 by Dark Enmity

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Hello again. I have just read your story breifly in the break on television. It is good, and I appreciate that you had a short amount of words available.
That is probably the most masterful thing about it. Nevertheless, it is obviously not your best work in the way of short stories.
I'd like to point out a few things:
“Ugh, that’s disgusting,” Ray said with revulsion. “To think that I put such a small amount on my main attraction.
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There was no hustling bustling conversation going on over by the buffet table, no party games occurring in the living room.
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I would never say hustling bustling conversation, I'd say something like 'there was no conversation going over the buffet table', or 'there was no hustle bustle going on over the buffet table/party.'
But I am an amatuer writer. You're probably more correct.
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06-Jul-2009 19:28:53

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This story might take a bit of explaining because people will think there is no real plot to it. This was written for a story contest, where the theme was "Burying The Hatchet". I decided then to make this story literal to that theme, which is why it has the same title as the contest. Enjoy. :) (Viewer discretion is advised as this is quite gory.)

15-Jul-2009 21:43:49 - Last edited on 16-Jul-2009 04:48:50 by Dark Enmity

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(¸.•´ (¸.•Burying The Hatchet
“Where should we bury it?”
“The hell should I know, Hank? You’re the one who swung it, for God’s sake!”
Hank’s eyes looked dull in the evening sunlight but flashed for instance with fear when Jeremy said those words. A shiver was sent down his spine, and he said, a little too coldly, “Your blood is on it as well.”
Jeremy was scratching his arms in an attempt to get the blood off his skin. The place where David had grabbed his arm felt like it had burned an impression with acid. Hank was pulling off his crimson soaked tee-shirt with a long slash of blood running vertically across. He wasn’t that fit and was quite body-shy for a full grown man, but in this state he felt he could run across Gielinor and back without any clothes.
Hank grabbed Jeremy’s shoulder who winced like it was painful to be touched. “So I am going to ask you again Jeremy. Where should we bury this thing?"
"B-by the tr-tr-tr...”
“Tree” was what he wanted to say, but all that came out was a long stutter followed by a few sobs. The saliva in his mouth felt salty and disgusting. He spat it out seeing it was red.
Hank understood what he wanted to say. Jeremy had used a hand to point at the big oak tree beside the red barn with white trim. Hanging from the tree was a braided rope that had been crudely tied around a car wheel to create a makeshift swing.
“That’s too close to the house,” Hank said softly, but everything in his body was pounding hard and loud. Blood was flowing too quickly through his head. His heart was thudding in his chest.
Jeremy looked at him with harsh eyes. “You want to go into the forest for a hike? Be my guest, but you will have to carry that thing the whole time.”
Hank looked at the weapon which was spiked with blood and it reminded him of what happened forty minutes earlier. David had walked on their property carrying a large document with a smug expression on his face.

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“Boys, we need to talk.” David was the landlord—technically Jeremy and Hank were only renting the house.
“What’s wrong? Jeremy took off his yellow gloves that he had been using to weed the garden. Hank walked from the barn, finished with milking old Bluebell.
“You never paid last months rent, or the rent before that, or the rent before that,” David said with almost a tone of enjoyment. He handed the document into Jeremy’s hands and he looked at it with a dumbfounded expression.
“What’s this?”
“A notice of eviction. You have one month to get your stuff and get out. I would say it’s been fun, boys, but it hasn’t. In fact it's been hell. And I will be celebrating the day when you finally move out.”
Jeremy’s eyes looked like they both didn't understand and were ready to burst in tears. “But...we will pay the money...just give us more time.” He was ready to crouch on his knees and plead to David.
“Forget it. You tried to play me like a sucker, and you lost. There is a nice family of four who want to spend there lives here. I daresay I will enjoy them.”
“You can’t kick us out! We will have nowhere to go!” Jeremy screamed. A few chickens in the barn clucked in surprise from the booming sound.
Hank had been silent the whole time. His hands were slowly gripping the handle of something beside a tree stump.
“Well, good luck living on the streets. Now if you just sign here I can—,”
Hank swung. The weapon traveled in a large semi-circle in line for David’s head. At the last moment he saw it and leaned to the right. But it was too little too late. It cut through his skin just below the armpit, leaving a spray of blood across Hank’s shirt.
“YOU’RE CRAZY!” David screamed, trying to crawl away. His right hand was wrapped around the wound. “YOU’RE ALL CRAZY! HELP!” Surprisingly, he managed to stand up and spontaneously attack Jeremy like he was the one who was doing the massacring. He succeeded a punch at Jeremy’s jaw, before collapsing on the damp ground.

15-Jul-2009 21:43:59 - Last edited on 15-Jul-2009 21:49:24 by Dark Enmity

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Hank didn't say anything. He knew it would make it too hard if he did. He couldn’t even say he was sorry. Bringing the weapon up again, David’s eyes followed it in a horrifying way.
“PLEASE, YOU CAN STAY! YOU CAN LIVE HERE!”
But all that escaped David’s mouth was “please”. After that the weapon struck his head, just like it was intended to with the first blow. The blade pierced the skull and David yelled in pain, still very much alive.
Hank knew from the war that people don’t die easily. He had seen men with guts half out and skulls half open. Humans could endure a lot before dying. That was the sick truth.
He swung again. The backswing grazed Jeremy’s arm leaving a thin line of blood. David managed to roll over but once again wasn’t very lucky. The weapon cut through his left ankle, sending his foot rolling down the hill with blood spraying out like a firecracker.
David was crawling away with both his arms. His body and clothes were stained with mud and dried blood. A hand lashed out and grabbed Jeremy’s wrist, who looked terrified. David collapsed, eyes facing the sky.
With one last blow the weapon hit his jugular, letting out a spurt of blood. His neck was torn to shreds with his head barely attached to his body by a flab of skin. David’s chest had stopped moving but his eyes remained open.
They had carried David’s body to the incinerator, behind the house. The body created a black smoke, which smelled of sewer and rodents. Hank guessed he could check “Smell the scent of rotting flesh” off the things-he-never-wanted-to-do list.
Both were extremely silent. Now they had a problem. Where to bury the murder weapon.
“Alright,” Hank said, defeated, not wanting to hold it a second longer. “Let’s go to the tree.”
So they walked up, both with shovels, Hank holding the weapon that had killed David. For the next hour they dug, until both were satisfied with the depth.

15-Jul-2009 21:44:05 - Last edited on 15-Jul-2009 21:52:27 by Dark Enmity

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“In you go,” Hank said, mostly to himself, as he dropped it inside. They filled the hole and stood over it with a fixed fascination, like someone mourning over a grave.
They left, and there the axe sat for the years to come. Hank and Jeremy had buried the hatchet.
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15-Jul-2009 21:44:25 - Last edited on 16-Jul-2009 18:55:58 by Dark Enmity

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