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13-Jun-2009 18:46:10

Thanks Tava once again for your feedback.

Unfortunately I in the midst of planning a long story. The plot is quite clearly formed in my head, though I want add more twists to give it that extra spark. The bad news is I will not be adding short stories as often because I will be working on this long story. I have no idea what the length of it will become but I am hoping 100-200 posts. We'll see though.

I don't want to give any of it away but it has been an idea in my head for a couple months, and at first I dismissed it as rubish, until a new character (His name is Oliver, and he will have an extraordinary gift) emerged into the plot. At first I thought, Hey, I could add a lot of depth with this one character. So then I started imagining more into my head, and know I actually think the plot is usable.

I still need to think up more twists as it is still a faintly straightforward plot. No matter, I expect I can conjure up more Oliver's .

Not sure if this will be a horror. I guess the most I can say right now is it will be a semi-horror. More of a thrill, though. Can't give you its title because I am positive I told someone months ago and they might remember but I can tell you it is based in an city deep, deep under runescape's surface. That clue won't help much, though.

For those that enjoy my short stories, sorry for the mild break I will be taking but if you read this long story I am creating it should be worth it. At least for me.

Hope you guys won't be mad. I may even incorporate some of the personalities you have seen in my shorts.

14-Jun-2009 04:59:52 - Last edited on 14-Jun-2009 06:24:57 by Dark Enmity

Oooh, I'll read it I prefer long stories to shorts (even though your short stories are some of the best I've ever read). It sounds interesting too, deep underground? What could it be?

14-Jun-2009 11:07:43

Hey look Kyle you got Dream to post again, so how much begging was it.

And yes I know my feedback is amazing, isn't it? Oh, a new longer story. Well but of course you have my word that I'll read it, and a thriller maybe. Deep underground, sounds interesting. But I think i'll keep my guesses to myself.

15-Jun-2009 18:57:28

Surprisingly it took no begging from Dream , but I may have hinted it when I was talking about my stories in my last chat with him. Anyways thanks Dream, your heart-warming comments can turn a miserable person into the happiest fairy tale character. And Tava thanks for your amazing compliments as well.

I don't mind if you guess just as long as you don't get it right. But I don't think you will. The story feels original, though I may be using variation of small sections of novels I have read, but varying them to my liking. But don't worry, It is going to be one of my first, and it won't be published so I doubt it will be an issue. The plot itself is original—though I haven't read much so I wouldn't know.

The twists are slowly adding in. Some aren't twists, just little additives—for instance, what happens to Oliver at school. Mostly I am just focusing on certain scenes (like the end, I am sure you are going to love it) that will add a mystical feel.

Don't make any promises yet, Tava. I am going full-out trying to make this with as much depth as possible (Though I hope I am not putting your expectations high with all this full out talk!) But I have dreams that it will be long. Don't know how long, I will give you a better idea when I start writing it, but I have chosen to write in chapter and mini chapters, sort of like how some novels are made.

Before I leave I want to thank Dream, because he gave me that tiny amount of push, which was what I needed to start this uncertain project.

15-Jun-2009 22:30:13 - Last edited on 15-Jun-2009 22:35:49 by Dark Enmity

Great job! Magnificent short stories. Very well done all around, in my opinion. These were very refreshing, really... I haven't read any good short stories for quite a while. It's also nice to know that there are still some good writers on this forum; it seems like all there is now is stupid noob stories written by seven year olds without even half a mind...

Anyways, there's only one thing I want to point out... The mother's dialogue at the beginning of Flynn's Alley seems kind of redundant to me. "You will get there in no time to Conner’s house." It seems like it should be more like "You will get to Conner's house in no time."

Oh, and my name is Kyle as well.

16-Jun-2009 02:56:28 - Last edited on 16-Jun-2009 02:57:52 by Binary Clone

Guess what I smell? Well actually i smell a fart right now But I think there is a reader in the distance.

And what you saw Dream in chat?! man I never get to talk to him. Also since you said all that my expactations are quite high and i dont like to be let down *draws out sword*

16-Jun-2009 13:32:10 - Last edited on 16-Jun-2009 13:34:26 by Tava60

Thank you King, I am pleased that you found one my errors—truthfully!

Tava: Dream is nocturnal (Well depends what timezone, but he is nocturnal for me and for lots of other people) if you want to see it good chance is you have to stay up late. Whether it be 10 in the evening or 3 in the morning I have no idea what it would be for you.

16-Jun-2009 13:40:50

What do you mean by truthfully? saying my feedback isnt good enough And yes he is quite nocturnal isn't he, I get on from midnight to 1:00 and he still wasnt.

16-Jun-2009 14:15:20 - Last edited on 17-Jun-2009 02:16:23 by Tava60