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Hey Reegena :)

Great story so far. It kept my attention, which is a pretty hard thing to do. I don't quite remember any grammar errors, so there couldn't have been many (if any at all.)

Only thing I noticed is how you said that the man's neck could have been sliced by anything from a bronze to a dragon dagger. I'm not quite sure, but aren't dragon weapons supposed to be very rare? Its just not something normal citizens would expect a murderer to have, especially since a quest has to be done to wield one.

It was a great read though. Keep up the good work!

10-Jan-2010 23:32:57

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Chapter 2

Alex found it hard keeping up with Rosie. For a petite girl, she was pretty fast. They went left and right through a maze of hallways. He could have sworn she was taking him in circles, because they went through the kitchen twice, and after twenty minutes of walking, they ended up right back at the front door, where they ascended a flight of stairs.

They met up with a short, well-fed woman with hair just as feathery as Rosettes, only gray. The old woman and Rosette talked for a moment in hushed tones.

"You let a peddler into the house?" The woman looked Alex up and down. This boy was dressed like a tramp. What was he doing, standing on her freshly polished floor?

Rosie shook her head. "Oh no, Mother," she tried cooling the old lady down. "He's here for an interview. I led him pointlessly about the house for a good half-hour, just like Mrs. Gildred said to do."

Alex was too busy watching the women fight to actually hear what they were saying. So this portly maid was Rosette's mother? He'd better make a good impression, then.

Rosie's mother glanced at Alex one more time, scrunching her face the way she would at a rat. This boy could not possibly be Mrs. Gildred's assistant. She wouldn't let that happen. "I'll go see what Mrs. Gildred wants done with the boy."

She dissappeared behind a door. Alex thought it'd be best to make this alone-time with Rosie worth while. "So, what do you do during your free time?"

Rosette stared at him, confused. "I don't get any free time."

"Oh," Alex felt his face go red. He tried again to rekindle conversation. "Read any good books, lately?"

Rosie shook her head. "I can't read."

Just in time to save them from awkward silence, Rosette's mother came back out through the door. "She says bring him in."

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The room they walked into was just as fascinating as the rest of the building. One wall was lined with mirrors, and the opposite with windows and French-style doors leading out a magnificant balcony which over-looked the rear garden. Part of the room was curtained off, probably the wash area, and the other half was occupied almost fully by a desk and a king-sized bed.

On the bed, though, lay a gorgeous young woman. She sat up and stretched. Alex took a step back in shock. She had long, shining black hair pulled back in a braid, and once her eyelids fluttered open, Alex was frozen by the most beautiful sky blue eyes. His tongue felt heavy in his mouth as he lost all ability to speak.

She yawned and set her hands in her lap. "This is the boy who wants to be my assistant?"

Rosette nodded, noticably upset by the looks Alex was giving the woman. "Yes, miss. This is Alexander Jaques."

"Jaques," the woman repeated slowly. "Alexander Jaques, I like it. How old are you?"

Alex remained unable to speak until a slight shake from Rosette brought him back to earth. "Sixteen, miss."

The woman clapped her hands together and smiled. "Sixteen? Amazing how that works! Rosie here is fifteen."

"Much younger than sixteen," Rosette's mother said quickly.

"Oh, pooh," the woman said. "Don't be such a spoil sport, Violet. I saw the way they were making eyes just before. Age means nothing. After all, Charles is twenty-nine, and I'm only twenty-four."

Alex had to keep imagining Rosie in his mind in order to keep from staring at the woman, after all, Rosie and her mother - Violet - kept refering to her as 'miss'. She must be Mrs. Gildred.

The woman threw her legs over the side of the bed and stood. Alex's eyes went wide when he saw she was wearing a silken night gown that didn't quite reach the knees of her long, long legs.

Violet rushed foreward and handed the woman a silk bathrobe. "Mrs. Gildred, you must cover yourself in front of other men!"

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She slipped on the bathrobe and sighed. "He's a boy, only sixteen. Don't be filling his head with nonsence about being a man."

Violet helped Mrs. Gildred to the curtained area. "Ah, but miss, boys are worse than men."

Mrs. Gildred laughed as she changed behind the curtain. "You only say that because of Rosie. I'm a married woman. You've seen married women before, right, Alex?"

He nodded. "Yes, miss."

Rosie took his statement the wrong way. She turned pink and jumped back, away from him.

"No," Alex corrected quickly. "My mother is married."

Rosette sighed in relief.

"Well," Violet placed her hands on her hips. "I'd like to hope so."

Alex exhaled. He was content with the fact there would be no pleasing Rosette's mother. "Now, miss, about this job as your husband's assitant."

Mrs. Gildred slipped out from behind the curtainted area. Now, she wore a long navy blue dress with a high collar. She'd let her black hair down, which made her look even more stunning. "Oh, yes. The job. That's why you're here," she sighed. "I never get company otherwise. Alright," She turned to Violet. "How about fetching us some tea out on the balcony? Oh! And, Rosie?"

"Yes?"

"Why don't you go help Lilly in the kitchen?"

Both of the maids nodded and left. Rosette seemed anxious about leaving Alex alone with Mrs. Gildred, but Violet couldn't wait to pull her daughter away.

When they'd left the room, Mrs. Gildred held open the door to the balcony. "I see you like Rosette?"

Alex shrugged and made his way onto the balcony. Inhaling the heavy spring air was refreshing. He had to level his head before he spoke again. "It's a nice day."

Mrs. Gildred laughed. "Oh, pooh. You boys are always changing the subject when I bring up girls!" She stretched herself out on a lounge chair.

"She's a nice girl," Alex suddenly felt hot, and would have taken his suit jacket off in a flash if he could have.

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Mrs. Gildred folded her hands in her lap. "I've known her for five years now. Many young suitors are after her." She glanced at him and smiled. "It's a good thing she likes you back."

Alex nodded. "Now, about this job..."

"Why do you change the subject?"

"Why do you?" He snapped, just as Violet pushed a cart of tea onto the balcony. A silent moment passed as she poured them each a cup, and Mrs. Gildred took it graciously.

After dismissing Violet and slowly sipping her tea, Mrs. Gildred sighed. "I'm sorry. I just enjoy a good chat with people I don't know, but you're right," she straightened up in her seat. "You're here for business."

Alex took a sip from his teacup. It was awful strong, and he made a face of distaste.

Mrs. Gildred, though, didn't seem to notice. "I know the add came off as my husband needing an assistant, but really, it's me."

He took another sip of his tea, just to be polite. He'd expected to be using his advanced math skills helping a banker, not holding a woman's skirt tail as she walked through the market. A wage was a wage, though. "I guess I could do that."

Mrs. Gildred smiled. "Have you a salary in mind?"

Alex cleared his throat. "Not really. I haven't been looking that long, you see. My mother became ill recently, and we haven't had a decent income since my father's death."

"I'm sorry."

"Yes, well," Alex folded up his sleeves. "My mother brought me this Varrock Herald to warn me about fishing alone in the woods-"

Mrs. Gildred cut him off, jumping to her feet and spilling her tea. "That man deserved to die! 50,000 gold pieces is pocket change when compared to the lifelong heartache his wife would have faced with him!" After seeing Alex's startled expression, she sank back down in her chair. Noticably red, she cleared her throat. "I just thought I'd get that out there."

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Alex continued after a brief moment of silence. Laughing in front of his future emplyer - especially at her - wouldn't be such a good idea. "As I was saying, I saw the add in there."

Mrs. Gildred nodded. "Very good. You got the job."

Alex just blinked. "What?"

She smiled her beautiful smile. "I like you, Alexander Jaques. You'll start out at 10,000 gold pieces a week. How's that?"

His mouth fell open. "10,000? But, but what about the other men you had in mind?"

Even her shrug was elegant. "I don't like them as much as you."

Alex smiled the biggest, cheesiest smile he'd smiled in years. "Oh, thank you. Thank you, Mrs. Gildred!"

She waved him off. "Oh, pooh. Call me Elizabeth like a good little assistant. Oh, yes, I require you to live here. Have Rhody - the grounds keeper - send you home with a carraige and fetch your mother. Violet will set her up nicely in a room. Can she cook?"

Alex nodded.

"Very well, then," Elizabeth said with a smile. "You can never have too many cooks. Oh, Alex!" She called to him just as he was leaving. "Have Rosie fit you a new suit."

"Yes, Mrs. - I mean, Elizabeth."

"And, Alexander?"

"Yes?"

She turned away from him, and her voice was distant. "There's no turning back now."

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