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[#SHLOFFO63]

[#SHLOFFO63]

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Grammar- 19/25- I have noticed several misplaced commas, quotations, and periods, in several places.

Spelling- 20/25- Your spelling is quite good exept for several or many areas. Near the beginning you have quite a few and's, those could be replaced with other words. I also noticed that you started some sentences with and. One thing is you Never start any kind of sentence with and. Other then that your spelling is very good. A few mis-spelled words here and there. Gradually, it improved.

Plot- 42/50- I found it fairly good. Not the best but I have read worse. If you continue writing I know you can improve all of this.

Pace- 13/15- This had been slow in several near the first couple posts, there's not alot I can say, but keep working on this to keep it fairly balanced.

Characters- 36/40- Very nice, could use some improvements but other then that, it is good.

In total you have 130 points!


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22-Aug-2007 19:01:28 - Last edited on 22-Aug-2007 19:02:03 by [#SHLOFFO63]

[#9DSH7Y6JX]

[#9DSH7Y6JX]

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Just getting this on my profile for now, expect an edit for my mini-review on this in a little while. (I read fast.)

I loved it. Very Lord of The Rings, with a long plot with many characters, but it was easy enough to follow, and always kept me compelled. Top notch stuff.

23-Aug-2007 16:12:10 - Last edited on 23-Aug-2007 16:42:06 by [#9DSH7Y6JX]

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