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Caydock

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Jonathan smirked at Rowan, who was staring at the delicacy, almost drooling at the sight of it. “What…what is that?” Rowan asked.

Jonathan looked up from the cake. “You’ve never had cake before?”

Rowan shook his head and Jonathan explained.

“Cake is a dessert. It’s made from flour, eggs and a bunch of other non-important stuff. But it has a special ingredient: chocolate!”

When Rowan stared blankly at him, Jonathan elaborated. “Chocolate is a delicacy from…”

Rowan interrupted him, “Alright, it’s a delicacy from somewhere far away that I’ve never been to and probably never will. Can I have a bite?”

After the meal was over, Jonathan and Rowan followed Lydia to their room. It was clean and comfortable, with two beds side by side along one wall. The beds had mattresses stuffed with straw and pillows of a similar make. A rough sheet and blanket were folded neatly and placed at the end of the beds.

After Lydia had left, Jonathan collapsed atop one of the cots. Rowan followed suit more slowly, taking the time to remove his boots and set them to the side.

“Rowan?* came Jonathan’s voice, muffled by the pillow.

“Mmm?” Rowan responded as he settled into the bed, pulling the covers over him.

“I was wondering…did your parents teach you much about the world?”

“What do you mean?”

Jonathan sat up and propped his head up with his hand. “I mean, who taught you to read and to write? Do you know anything about manners or girls?”

Rowan laughed, *I don’t know anything about women but I have a decent understanding of manners. And my mom taught me basic things like arithmetic, simple geography and reading and writing. She did*’t always live in Aridy, you know. She used to live here, actually.”

Jonathan was taken aback, “Your mother used to live in Derthi?”

“She lived around here, at least. I think that her family’s home was a farm in the hills. She came into town occasionally and, believe it or not, used to talk to people.”

“Amazing,” Jonathan said dryly, *do continue.”

14-Feb-2011 20:51:26

Caydock

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“Anyway, she met my father and they moved to Aridy after they were married. They liked it there and decided to stay. At least that’s what I assume. They’re very closemouthed about anything that happened before I was born. For that matter,” he mused, “they’re closemouthed about everything that’s happened after I was born as well.”

Rolling over on his side, Jonathan said, “But it seems as though you have a small amount of people skills. You don’t stutter or freeze when you talk to people and you actually have a sense of humor.”

“That’s probably from spending one summer with my cousins at Clomulous.”

“Aha!” said Jonathan, sitting up, “I knew you couldn’t possibly be a full Aridian. Now it makes sense. And you were complaining about never seeing the world!”

Rowan dismissed Jonathan’s words with a wave of his hand, although the merchant couldn’t see it in the dark, “I was only twelve and Clomulous is a day’s ride from Aridy. Not exactly an adventure.”

“Whatever. But you said you have cousins in Clomulous. Why did your parents let you visit?”

An angry voice shouted from next to them, “Pipe down in there!” causing Jonathan to jump involuntarily. “On second thought, we can finish this conversation tomorrow. Goodnight.”

Within moments, both men were asleep.

14-Feb-2011 20:52:11

Reaper Ben

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I must say, the story is moving along great!

Just a few side notes, it would have been nice if we knew what the man in front of the inn, the guy taking care of the horses, and the waitress looked like. The only description given is that she has blonde hair.

Two other things, you said that Rowan was hungry because he refused to eat the bean stew; but was that not back in his hometown? And did he not eat ham on with Jonathan during their travel?

The last thing is that Jonathan sits up twice during their discussion about Rowan's parents Other than these few details, I really liked it! =)

17-Feb-2011 15:00:12

Englishkid62

Englishkid62

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Arrgh, still have to read this. I'm afraid I really am stuck in a string of exams, assessments and deadlines until 8th March. You see, even my novel project has been brought to a halt and practising piano takes up most of my day >.<

23-Feb-2011 15:32:13

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