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Tialtair
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Tialtair

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~/+\~Prose~/+\~
Name of Story: ~/\Crippled Hope/\~
Plot Depth: (Out of 50) Easily 50.
Grammar: (Out of 60) 50. There were frequent errors, for such a magnificient writer. (1 a chapter )
Spelling: (Out of 50) 48, a couple of mistakes.
Support Level: (Out of 20) You've got a LOT of support. 15.
Total: (Out of 180) 163.
Comments from the Reviewer:
I loved this story. I must admit, there are few writers these days who can capture an audience with JUST the prologue.
You're the second person I've reviewed that has managed to capture my attention after reading just the Prologue. By using the Party-hats, and their colors to play a distinct part in your story, you've managed to create a worthwhile plot for many.
I hope you continue this story all the way through. Many people obviously have enjoyed it, as I have. It's definetely a worthwhile story to read.
My Advice:
Check every chapter post before doing another one, for errors, I noticed some silly mistakes. BUt that's about it.
My only other piece of advice, is that there should definetely be a sequel to this story when it is complete.

29-May-2009 10:43:31 - Last edited on 29-May-2009 10:49:49 by Tialtair

Silver Snake

Silver Snake

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Thanks! It is just a draft, so I will get around to mopping up all the errors.
Very good responce time... I usually take a few weeks before I'm motivated enough to read a story ^_^
~I do have a signature, I just can’t be stuffed using it.

30-May-2009 06:01:56

Tialtair
Dec Member 2023

Tialtair

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I believe that if a reviewer has a story to review, he should do it PRONTO. :)
That's possibly one good quality about my Reviewing Business.
I've also changed the reviewing Reply Format, so it'll be more benificial for those who apply for reviews. :)

30-May-2009 07:58:10

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