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19-Apr-2008 00:43:46
Sir, I honestly tried to read your story. I couldn't it was simply too long and I have no patience. I may sound terrible asking this but would you mind checking out my story? It is called "The Ultimate Story of Survival."
Thank you,
and Good Luck with your story. Im sure I would have enjoyed it. Oh well, I'll see the movie. Hope thats not cheating
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Thank you,
and Good Luck with your story. Im sure I would have enjoyed it. Oh well, I'll see the movie. Hope thats not cheating
.
19-Apr-2008 03:07:53
I read the first several adds on the front page.
I awake, bolting upright and panting like a tired dog. Sweat seeps from pores all over my body and drip their way down. I lie back, tired and frightened. This was the third nightmare i'd had during this month. All had been similar in multiple ways though things changed. In the first dream the candles hadn't been lit whereas they had in the second and third. However in the second dream I opened up my cabinet and not the tool cupboard. Everything else had been the same though.
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"Good book?" I asked upon entering the room "Mmhmm" She sounded. "It's about a boy venturing into The Wilderness to confront his fears."
"His fears being?"
"A fear of monsters. What else do you find in The WIlderness?"
I chuckled and sat in the seat opposite her.
"Aren't you supposed to be in school today?" I asked
~~~
"Yes! Today's adventure day!" She giggled delightfully. "Where are we off to today adventuring buddy?"
~~~
Other than those errors, I like what I'm reading so far. The horror of it is pretty tame, though, maybe you would like to be a bit more gorier?
I awake, bolting upright and panting like a tired dog. Sweat seeps from pores all over my body and drip their way down. I lie back, tired and frightened. This was the third nightmare i'd had during this month. All had been similar in multiple ways though things changed. In the first dream the candles hadn't been lit whereas they had in the second and third. However in the second dream I opened up my cabinet and not the tool cupboard. Everything else had been the same though.
~~~
"Good book?" I asked upon entering the room "Mmhmm" She sounded. "It's about a boy venturing into The Wilderness to confront his fears."
"His fears being?"
"A fear of monsters. What else do you find in The WIlderness?"
I chuckled and sat in the seat opposite her.
"Aren't you supposed to be in school today?" I asked
~~~
"Yes! Today's adventure day!" She giggled delightfully. "Where are we off to today adventuring buddy?"
~~~
Other than those errors, I like what I'm reading so far. The horror of it is pretty tame, though, maybe you would like to be a bit more gorier?
19-Apr-2008 03:16:12
It gets gorier from chapter 12 onwards
I'll go fix up those mistakes now and thank you for reading
I'll go fix up those mistakes now and thank you for reading
19-Apr-2008 03:31:03
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