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Review of Ardhonmeth by Poller5
Spelling and Grammar/ Organization -- 23/25 – My god, Poller; I did*’t see many mistakes. Good job. Most of it were just typos or just small comma mistakes that you have not noticed. I don’t feel like going through it again and finding them for you, but if you just look through it once more, you might find them.
Description/Vocabulary -- 27/30 -- Wow, there was a lot of description, but was half of it really necessary? It seemed like there was a bit too much detail. I don’t know why. What I did like, however, was that when a battle came along, you got to the point instead of making it so long. I hate when one battle lasts so long. So it’s great that you did*’t poke a hole in my pet peeve. I wish you’d describe Seren better, though.
Plot/Conflict -- 59/65 -- I thought the plotline was very good. I liked how you foresaw the future of RuneScape, and by god, how creepy it is. I also enjoyed having Seren alive instead of a more major god like Saradomin or Zamorak. The downside of this plot is that Seren wasn’t harmed at all, and I think it would’ve been a bit better if something happened to Seren too, yet they beat Zaros. Yes, that would’ve meant more detail, which I said the story was a bit much, but this is more of an add-on. That’s just what I think.

25-Mar-2008 00:49:28

Venmi

Venmi

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Originality/Creativity -- 28/30 -- How you create all those names just doesn’t cease to amaze me, Poller. They sound like names from movies, but for some reason, they’re not at all. I like the use of the accents and that stuff. When it comes to name-making, you’re very creative. The plot was also something original. Yes, some stories take place in the future, but this one is the destruction of Gielinor. How awesome! :D
Characters -- 44/50 -- The characters in this story were good, however I was hoping that you’d describe the character’s physical appearance a bit more. I know what the gods look like, but my pet peeve is that characters don’t have a physical appearance to them. I hate that in so many books. Make sure to add that next time in your stories, please!
Total -- 181/200 -- That’s a 90.5% Boy, I feel like I’ve lost my talent. I don’t like this review, but this is what I’m thinking at the time. I might re-review you sometime when I’m actually fine. I’ve had a lot going on in my life right now. Most of the things in the review are true, but I just have had a lot of things going on with school, my friends, and that’s brought my motivation for anything way down! I’m sorry for such a poor quality review, Poller. I hope this review helped somewhat.
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25-Mar-2008 00:49:47

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