The story is great, though I've read it before when I was non-member but I found a little mistake on page 16:
on the 1st post
Kashan saw a shadow on the edge of his vision a few minutes later. As he turned around, he saw Arya walking towards him. She stared him dead in the eye, her green eyes glistening with **** as she walked towards him, her movements so soft it was almost as if she glided over the floor.
on the second post
Arya was petrified. Her blue eyes, normally displaying joy and curiosity, were now open to the extreme, displaying the purest of terror.
First it says green eyes then it says blue eyes.
But 10/10 on the story and please continue it.
15-Nov-2006 23:24:46
