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Lol, you hardly editted the first part of the bar fight as well, I'm very observant...

Wow, you really ARE very observant Uh, bar fight, that's the scene at the Barbarian Village, right? I remember shockingly little of my own story Um, I made it a bit more credible, making Kaiser not kill three barbarians before limping down with bloodloss, but throw his scimitar to kill'em
Not enough? Oh, bummer, I'll have my work cut out for me when it's finished...

~<><>~ Siig, Novelist of TAL, Silver member of TGP, and Golden quill of TSQ ~<><>~
-~* The Icelandic Grim Reaper is here *~-

20-Sep-2006 19:35:14

20-Sep-2006 19:37:55

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Here Siig, I know how hard it is to rewrite the whole story, but you should do it now, it'll be much easier.

Here's the way I see would probably be the easiest for you.

First, edit it so Kaiser is NOT murdered in the bar fight scene, or de-thumbed. Make him kick serious ***, let me see your violence.

He's not murdered, and he keeps his thumb already...I'm not that great with violence

Then, take out any scene of him in the hospital.

Why?

Next, maybe make a new /old chapter that would add anything about Kaiser that you would want but wouldn't affect the storyline overly much.

You mean history and such, right?

Then, just add a small section of him in the war, just make him kick some *** and then possibly get sidetracked by something else that would take him elsewhere, it would make it easier to add something else later.

Hmm, good idea, a plan already forming in my mind...

That should be fine, then you don't have to worry about editing the WHOLE story once your done with it, good for you and I

Meh, I hate doing things in small bits. I like few, BIG projects. Why do you think my first story is 120 pages on word, UNFINISHED?

~<><>~ Siig, Novelist of TAL, Silver member of TGP, and Golden quill of TSQ ~<><>~
-~* The Icelandic Grim Reaper is here *~-

20-Sep-2006 19:41:45

20-Sep-2006 19:44:56

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"Xen: Yeah, sorry about the fight scene with him, but he was really a bit to powerful. To those of you who didn't see it, it was basically Xen dumped his daggers, saying he could beat Kashan to a bloody pulp with his bare hands, and then he beat the living hell outta him, making him drop to the floor, shielding his face while Xen kicked him.
Not a good image for Kashan "

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Thing is, wouldn't it be better if Kashan gets a hard opponent once in a while? I mean, he's not invincible... and given that (in my stories) Xen managed to slaughter well over 150K soldiers AND Zamorak, I think I'd say that he's powerful...

The other thing was that it made the fight scene longer, and a bit more descriptive...

20-Sep-2006 20:26:04

He DOES get hard opponents (in my opinion...I think they're hard...) I know he's not invincible, and BIOs tend to REALLY change between stories. I mean, I really couldn't use the Xen DarkWolfe who was in your stories, it just wouldn't fit. You notice how he's evil here XD
And about longer and more descriptive, I noticed, thanks

~<><>~ Siig, Novelist of TAL, Silver member of TGP, and Golden quill of TSQ ~<><>~
-~* The Icelandic Grim Reaper is here *~-

20-Sep-2006 20:30:34 - Last edited on 20-Sep-2006 20:30:48 by [#80N8R0VWZ]

20-Sep-2006 20:32:57

20-Sep-2006 20:35:30

20-Sep-2006 20:42:25

I DID leave like 5 minutes after you started it

Well, no complaining, nice, must resume whining to get adds.

*puts on costume*

ADD NOW OR ELSE I WILL FALL OFF THIS CLIFF!!!

...hanger.

20-Sep-2006 22:42:51