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The Last Dragon: Santhari
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Nice! Is that girl a bio that I missed, and if it was can u give me the page, I wanna read it
10-Feb-2011 18:17:23
"This was the first of the Masters that didn't give Mathew the impression that they could kill him with a single movement, in at least twenty different ways." So funny...
Anyway, it was a good chapter overall with sprinkles of tiny mistakes on top. But I like sprinkles...but only on cupcakes, not in stories.
"She was teaching him about herbs and the everything about the human body known to the Bentarin. This was so that he could strike anywhere on the human body with either his fists or a needle and capacitate, kill or simply drop an opponent." (1st post, middle of 4th paragraph)
You have an extra "the" in the first sentence. And I think you mean incapacitate (to make unable) not capacitate. That was most obvious mistake I caught.
Anyway, it was a good chapter overall with sprinkles of tiny mistakes on top. But I like sprinkles...but only on cupcakes, not in stories.
"She was teaching him about herbs and the everything about the human body known to the Bentarin. This was so that he could strike anywhere on the human body with either his fists or a needle and capacitate, kill or simply drop an opponent." (1st post, middle of 4th paragraph)
You have an extra "the" in the first sentence. And I think you mean incapacitate (to make unable) not capacitate. That was most obvious mistake I caught.
11-Feb-2011 21:16:45
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